Every Moment That Goes By

Personally i thought this would be really good song lyrics lol it was really good and expressed well thnx for entering my contest :):) if your have some spare time plz look at some of my poems thnx xxx alex xxx

Awww.. dont worry.. he'll be back soon.. this was good, but i felt that it would have been better without the reptition of "Every moment that goes by,
I think about being with you
About kissing you
About hugging you
About being with you"
i feel that you should have put in another stanza there.. also the last line lacked some of the strength the rest of the poem contained.. all in all, good job! 4/5

I LOVE tthis poem! I really know what you're talking about! Great poem!

Omg i can so relate to this poem becuase my bf lives far away from me and that is wat i feel that he is always in my heart ... i love ur work... and thanks for the commment !!!
take care
xoxo
robyn