Falling in Love

by Yrem Crish   Jul 2, 2006


When I first saw you
I was afraid to get near you
When I get near you
I was afraid to hold you
When I hold you
I was afraid to hug you
When I hug you
I was afraid to kiss you
When I kiss you
I was afraid to fall in love with you
When I fall in love with you
I was afraid to lose you
and baby, I want you to know
I can't live without you....

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  • 11 years ago

    by Veamm

    Greetings

    I like the shortness but it is exploading with emotions. Good job.

    When I first saw you
    I was afraid to get near you
    When I get near you
    I was afraid to hold you
    When I hold you
    I was afraid to hug you
    When I hug you
    I was afraid to kiss you
    When I kiss you
    I was afraid to fall in love with you
    When I fall in love with you
    I was afraid to lose you
    and baby, I want you to know
    I can't live without you....

    I won't say anything about the grammar errors. But, I want to emphasize the simplicity of the words and the style. The doubtness and the feelings you wanted to convey. And, Of course the repeatition, this is a perfect example of a good repeatition. Superb. Well done.

    Keep on writing.
    Simplicity is your style in my opinion.
    5 for me

  • 11 years ago

    by Rohit Sapra

    Loved this poem and the flow of it is truly flawless. Feeling of pure love is one of the most amazing feelings in this world.

  • 11 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Thanks", i really appreciate your comments...

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    My heart beats for this poem 100/100

  • 11 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Great poem!

    When I first saw you
    I was afraid to get near to you
    When I get near to you
    I was afraid to hold you
    When I hold you
    I was afraid to hug you
    When I hug you
    I was afraid to kiss you
    When I kiss you
    I was afraid to fall in love with you
    When I fall in love with you
    I was afraid to loss you
    and baby, I want you to know
    I can't live without you....

    ^
    Second line.get rid of 'to'
    I was afraid to get near you

    Third line. Get rid of "to"
    When I get near you

    Loss= change it to "lose"

    Just in my opinion it flows better(:
    This poem is true with a great meaning. To afraid to get close because you don't want to lose him. Scared of being to close might make him leave.

    Over all great love poem<3
    5/5 !