I Had A Dream (Part 2)

by Just Another Dreamer   Jul 5, 2006


I'm not finished with this but I'd like to see what you guys thinks so far so I know what I need to change/add. I'd appreciate the comments. Thanks
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The touch of his fingers brought be back to reality
As his fingers gently caressed my skin.
Embarrassed slightly for getting lost in thought,
I gave him a sheepish grin.
He laughed at my expression,
And a bit harder as I blushed.
As I allowed my fingers to wander some
It was my turn to giggle, as I saw him flush.
I felt his grip get tighter
As his fingers grasped my hips.
I could feel his body tremble some
As I touched his chest tenderly- using just my finger tips.
I could feel his gaze upon me,
I had to look away.
And even though a part of my wished they would-
His eyes- they never strayed.
He took my chin- tilted it up
As he lightly pressed his lips against my forehead.
And although he didn't make a sound,
I saw the words in his eyes, and this is what they said:
"Baby, surely you must know,
You've made my life worthwhile.
And even through the hard times,
You've always made me smile."
"Angel you are beautiful,
You've given meaning to my life.
There's nothing I wouldn't do for you.
I want you to be my wife."
"Butterfly I love you,
I've wanted to tell you for so long.
From the very start I knew,
In your heart is where I belong."
Taken by surprise,
I leaned back, my arms still around his neck
I couldn't stop from grinning,
As I gave him a gentle peck
He leaned in closer before swooping down,
Grabbing my legs, he picked me up.
I wrapped my legs around his waist.
I could almost feel my feelings erupt.
I felt him place his hands carefully
One under my leg, the other on my back
As I stared at him, never taking my eyes off his,
I knew what his eyes were about to ask
"Honey do you think the time is right?
You're ready? Are you sure?
You don't have to do anything you don't want to."
My thoughts began to blur.
I gave my head a nod
As I slowly closed my eyes.
When I opened them,
His expression took me by surprise.
He grinned at me from ear to ear
As he wrapped his arms around me, squeezing me tight.
He swam over to the opposite bank,
Looking through the darkness and trees for something to his right.
Lighting lit the sky once more
And seeing what he had been looking for
He rushed back to me
Kissing my once more.
He leaned over, kissing the top of my head
As he pushed his body hard against mine
Gripping my hips he backed me up
Until my back was pressed against the side
We climbed out of the water
Picking me up in his arms, he headed into the trees
He held me close to his chest
To protect me from the breeze.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Vox

    Will there ba a part three?

  • 16 years ago

    by Henry

    You have to finish it=) be a shame to not finish this great work of art it be like that george washington pic that never got finished being painted

  • 17 years ago

    by dandy

    Aww that's so sweet. Make sure he treats you right....Can't wait for the rest!

    ~dandy~

  • 17 years ago

    by Jesse Miller

    What your doing is more story telling, only the words rhyme in this book. I don't know if you ment to make it so long but you could of sumed up all of it in 1/3 the senenses. What makes a poem is that they get all the feeling at once in the 1/3 of your poem instead of drawn out emotion. you want to hit em with everything you got in a sudden burst and leave them breathless. I'm not one to talk I'm just trying to be helpful sorry if it sounds anything other than a helpful critique. The sylabals in the lines are too different which throws the flow of the poems off alsto. But critisism aside I like your feeling and your ability to tell a story. I can almost see it myself... I'm impressed

  • 17 years ago

    by InFaTuAtEdMiSs

    Plz for the love of god finish it ill be going crazy until you do i love so much so far!! plz read and comment on some of mine i like ur style and i would greatly appreciate it