I like it i think u should finishs it. its a good poem plz read ans comment some of mine to plz

I seriously like this poem...........its sweet..........yet sexy...........good job......................BUT FINISH IT!!!

An enjoyable read.

Plz for the love of god finish it ill be going crazy until you do i love so much so far!! plz read and comment on some of mine i like ur style and i would greatly appreciate it

What your doing is more story telling, only the words rhyme in this book. I don't know if you ment to make it so long but you could of sumed up all of it in 1/3 the senenses. What makes a poem is that they get all the feeling at once in the 1/3 of your poem instead of drawn out emotion. you want to hit em with everything you got in a sudden burst and leave them breathless. I'm not one to talk I'm just trying to be helpful sorry if it sounds anything other than a helpful critique. The sylabals in the lines are too different which throws the flow of the poems off alsto. But critisism aside I like your feeling and your ability to tell a story. I can almost see it myself... I'm impressed

Aww that's so sweet. Make sure he treats you right....Can't wait for the rest!

~dandy~

You have to finish it=) be a shame to not finish this great work of art it be like that george washington pic that never got finished being painted

Will there ba a part three?