Picture, Perfect {Ottava Rima}

by Natalie   Jul 7, 2006


Our friendship was meant to last forever,
And we've come too far to throw it away.
How can I make this anymore clearer,
When I just can't find the right words to say.
Through the good and bad; we stuck together,
Cause we always knew things would be okay.
Picture, perfect; Is what we used to be,
But the truth underneath no one could see.

Two different lives with secrets hidden,
And only one key to open the door.
Mouths closed shut because no one would listen,
To the fears in our cries when they would soar.
Friendships can fall apart, it's now proven,
But I hope we get through this like before.
Picture, perfect; Is what we used to be,
Now can you see the truth that's within me?

Copyright © Natalie 2006

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Ottava Rima is a poem where the stanzas consist of eight
lines each. Each line has a ten -or- eleven syllable count.
The rhyming scheme for Ottava Rima is as follows:

abababcc
dededeff
ghghghii
And so on for as many stanzas as you wish
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{It's my first go at doing this type of poem. Please tell me what you think, all comments will be returned as per usual.}

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  • 11 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Oh my...This actually made my eyes water. You are such a good writer, you don't even know how much your poems have touched others. This is almost exactly what happened with my friends and us at the end of the year. It was grad for us. Anyways...love the poem overall. 5/5 Good job! And you and I have a lot in common as I see lol. xoxo

    ¤ Samantha ¤

  • 11 years ago

    by TheSickness

    I liked it

    good job

  • 11 years ago

    by ├Truely_Spoken┤

    Very nice poem- thanks for sharing it with us
    I have a new poem now "Phone Booth"- i would really appreciate it if you could read/rate it :)

  • 11 years ago

    by ├Truely_Spoken┤

    Very nice poem- thanks for sharing it with us
    I have a new poem now "Phone Booth"- i would really appreciate it if you could read/rate it :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Chris

    I really like this one. Its a good change from the sad poems. (not that there bad lol)
    ANd i loved this verse
    Two different lives with secrets hidden,
    And only one key to open the door.
    Mouths closed shut because no one would listen,
    To the fears in our cries when they would soar.

    its worded great

    keep it up

    God Bless

    _Chris

    PS
    5/5 lol