Comments : Simplistic thoughts

  • 17 years ago

    by Courtney

    Oh my gosh. This is like my favourite poem ever! 5/5!! Much love.

    -*La Little Lor Lor*

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Well...this though short was well done. Thought provoking and nice. Loved the words and the ending had been a particular favorite. Well done with this piece.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by Tanecia

    Great poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    That is so brilliant. i wasn't expecting something quite so good. it was simple but very to teh point. i love the questionability in every line. "if i gave you a light would u wlak in teh dark"
    very very kool.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Awesome. That pretty much sums it up. But the long version would be.

    This is a very interesting piece. I liked the fact that you made it rhyme, and the rythym and flow were great. I didn't even realized it rhymed until I re-read it. It really does get one to think. A really deep poem, written in short. Awesome.

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Omg wow! I loved this! I love question poems! They always make you think. lol. The flow was really good. The rhyming was also very good. This was a very deep, yet short poem. Well done! =]

    Cayce x

  • 17 years ago

    by MemoirsOfMe

    'If I gave you an answer, would you ask me the question.
    Or would you already know what it means.'

    I really liked that stanza. Is it meant not to have question marks on the end? Because it was implying a question. But I really do like this. I loved its overall message!

  • 17 years ago

    by not a poet

    My favorite so far. i really liked this one!!!
    keep up the amazing writes!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cory Mastrandrea

    I think this one is great as it is. Even though it seems like you stay general just like the other one, the words you use enable the reader to pput their own particular meanings to it. For example:

    If I gave you a light, would you discover new truths.
    Or would you just believe what you've only seen.

    This helps guide the reader into thinking about what they believe they see on a normal die that is a bunch of lies. TO mind can come media, shows, movies, friends actions, etc. The last poem didn't necessarily do the same thing to this extent.

  • 17 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    Umm... I like this. It starts of very well with a great visual. But this bit doesn't sit comfortably with me:

    "It's the simplist words that turn thoughts into actions.
    Speak softly and live out every dream."

    Surely the simplest thoughts turn words into actions, rather than the reverse? That seems to be the theme conveyed in the following line.

    Maybe I misinterpreted!

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Brilliant!
    This poem really touched me, it made me smile, it made everything come into focus and it was so beautifully written, you have so much talent!
    xxxxx