Comments : Quiet as a mouse

  • 17 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Powerful and enchanting! Worded so perfectly. The flow is just effortless. Imagery is fantastic, the whole poem is simply superb!

  • 17 years ago

    by Lu

    Melissa you have such a wonderful way with words, you hold the readers attention from beginning to end .

    I am with Brandy on this stanza....
    The shy poet
    carries a mouthful of words
    in her back pocket,
    sometimes she neatly folds them
    into tiny little stars
    and makes paper wishes
    on the blank midnight sky"

    The imagery you create with this is completely jaw-dropping awe .

    Wonderfully penned poetry Melissa

  • 17 years ago

    by limp

    You're my favourite poet on this site ! :]

    though her teeth are dressed in barbed wire

    is my favourite line.x

  • Wow. Such a lovely poem. This was amazing. Loved your choice of wording. It was great. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by PS

    Hey this is excellent i love the end.

    can quickly discard her silly thoughts
    before any mortal can see through
    her own translucent shell

    great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Katie

    What an amazing write - You have so cleverly used language to paint so vivid and real a pictre - well done
    K xx

  • 14 years ago

    by John Long

    Sublime imagery throughout but especially the first verse. Keep those words coming through the barbed wire!