Wow! Connie! Since I read your first poem you have improved SO MUCH. It really looks like you're taking what people say on board, and the structure and flow of your words is really coming together. And what's most important is you don't ramble on (like I'm doing now) and it all comes across as so heartfelt.

Good stuff!

Awww... that as really sweet :)

Those '~' are kinda distracting though but that could be just me.

It was okay. Not great, not horrible. The flow was great but I think you could've used better words.

Awe, what a sweet meaning for a poem =] So cute! The flow was a bit choppy throughout the poem, but your message came through sweet and clear. I liked it! Nice job

4/5 because there was really no flow. the word choice was ok but it needs a little work.

very nice poem. i loved the topic