Comments : Gone

  • 17 years ago

    by Chris

    I liked the format. ( and I dont write ever poem with the same format so I fu dont like new styles lol sorry haha) good write
    I liked the emotions and words

    GOd Bless

    -Chris

  • 17 years ago

    by Megadrive

    Yeah!!! I love it! I am relieved=) U used... not so often used words, less common. And thats refreshing=) and it just made your poem so much better! I like the meaning of this poem, the flow, the word choice, and the emotion=) So u did an awesome job! Keep up the good work because this is excellent! 5/5!

    ~+Megan+~

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    This is different to alot of poems I've read lately, But it's a great poem. I really liked the 4th stanza, To me it stood out the most. You used great vocab in this aswell. I don't think there's anything that should be changed at all. Great job! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Wow.
    it was like you were painting on a canvas.
    I love the style you have been 'tainted' with..lol
    Im more of a rhyming poetry person myself.
    but this blew me away.
    5/5
    defiantely.
    ~Emah

  • 17 years ago

    by ShhhhItsASecret©

    First, I'd like to point out my favorite stanza:

    "Now, I marvel why the snapshots aren’t yet
    covered in dust. Only to reminisce
    the memories that are more whimsical
    in mind than in reality. Fortunately,
    my indulgence in solitude has removed
    cobwebs that our shared years had veiled."

    This poem was filled with emotion. It was a lovely piece of literature. You have a great talent and you use it well. I also love your use of vocabulary; making it sound mature and insightful.

    I personally am not very fond of poems that end a line in the middle of a statement, because it tends to studder the flow, but your flow was very good, despite that. It's a very good poem. Keep writing, hun. You have an amazing talent!! Overall rating: 4.9/5. :)

    ~BJ~

  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    Well I can honestly say, half of those words i did not understand lol, sorry i'm kind of slow! but from what i did understand it was great and it flowed well..you wrote it beautifully!

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    You have an amazing way with words. It reads like letter you'd write someone - not just a poem. But it doesn't read poorly as a poem either, if that makes sense.

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    Beautifully written. Using different vocabulary really makes it stand out. I loved the fourth staza as so often people wallow in what is gone when someone leaves.
    Wonderfull job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. umm.. wow! lol.. That poem was amazing, it absolutely blew me away. I sat here and read it about 4 or 5 times. I love the way that you described everything. And you had great vocabulary in this. My favorite stanza was:
    See -- air smells sweeter without
    you breathing it before me,
    and pillows feel fresher with only
    my hair caressing them. The knot is untied,
    and the white memorial marking on my finger
    has healed and forgotten our past.
    Amazing job on this! I loved it from the beginning to the end. You have some great talent! Keep writing! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by J Lau

    Love the poem. Haven't read your poems for quite a while... I'm happy to get the sense of a more relaxed and happier writer. This poem certainly contains your unique style of writing... love the choice of words and the mood you expressed within. Good work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is really good no wonder you got loads of comments and votes :):)

    please comment on my poems i like to have feedback thanx xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I love it

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Also not your best, but very strong with emotion. I'm not sure what else to say, really. Forgive me.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    This is a breath of fresh air on this site :) Not all, I loved him, then he left and now I'm happy.

    and according to my calendars that was
    a long time ago…

    ^ Great line. I really enjoyed this poem