Nice poem. Rhymes flowed well and I don't think it was to long. I hope you get over this rat soon unfortunately there are many like him.
Looking forward to reading about Mr Right (he is out there)
Good effort none the less

Most of the poem flowed really well. There were a couple of spots that were hard to read, but other then that the flow was great. I liked the imagery you used, but I think you could've used more. The rhyming was very good. None of it felt forced when I read through it. All in all I think it was a very good poem. Sad, but very good. And relatable.

Another great poem. It wasnt too long, in fact it was just the right length for me.
It was very sad, and quite dark in places.
keep writing
xxxxxx

Loved the ending. This was such a sad poem, and I'm so sorry if it's true. It was good though, I could relate a little also. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

It wasn't really sad to me. The rhyomes felt a bit shaky at times but that could be because f a few unneeded words (Words you can take out and wouldn't mess up the sentence) Instead of saying, "I felt like..." Maybe you could say I was.... or something like that to add more impact to the sentence. As for the length, it wasn't too long. It wasn't too short. It go the point across so any length would have been perfect for it. And isn't poetry about getting a point across and expressing yourself?

" started to love the other him.
And you became ever so dim.

I was then told when we were still going,
That you spent time with her without me knowing.
I wasn't truely hurt until I was told,
That you slept with her...Now wasn't that bold?"

I really liked these lines and I don’t think it was to long at all well done

A good poem, but i think ur trying too hard to rhyme, ur poems would flow better if u just concentrate on the feelings and the words rather than how they fit together, theyl come together by themselves :)

-biscuit-

Through those deep, flooling green eyes,
[fooling]
He & me...
What a great wish that would be.
He & Me.
We're not meant to be.
[I absolutely loved these lines.. It sent a chill down my spine]

A great write.. The rhyming seemed a bit forced, but it was a really good writing/topic job anyways... It's very sad.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Awh Hunny. I liked this one. Yet again I can really relate and it's well written. I agree with what you are trying to say in this poem. Kinda like the situation I am in right now. anyway. Love it. Great Write.

I love the repitition of he&me (the title) in the last paragraph! n it all ends so wonderfully, it is all very well written!

Awww wow i can really relate to this poem. oh so very sad, but wonderful written although some of the rhymes weren't that good and seemed to pushed into the poem, but what the poem is about is great. keep writing! 5/5

~Kristina

Good job, i would agree with you it's well written. the rhymes seemed easy and not forced. the flow was impressive, i didn't get stopped anywhere. perfect ending in my opinion, it totally finishes the poem. 5/5

(2nd stanza, 3rd line... Fooling? yes? not flooling)