Comments : Childish Little Games.

  • 17 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    You are so annoying.
    Has anyone ever told you that?
    I wish you could spend a day in my shoes.
    You selfish little rat.

    You get everything you want.
    Even if it is something you don't deserve.
    Why don't you just off a cliff?
    That is what I would prefer.

    I really liked those 2 stanzas. I don't suppose it was inntended to be funy but it made me laugh. (guess I'm just twisted)
    Awonderful expression of what we would love to say to many people.
    Great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    Ok first of all this:
    Why don't you just off a cliff?
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    i think 'just' should me 'jump' or 'just jump' either way it would sound better! =D

    But i can also relate to this poem..it is lovely your anger really shines through and that is what makes it unique. Writing something about a thing that is true always seems to come out better..Well in my poems anyways..lol great job hun!

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    This is a different take on 'friendship' poetry. Lol, I know what you mean though. There are some friends that get on your last nerve, but you still keep them around because they are always there for you. That really does sound like one of my close friends. Good stuff, a really different poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Better to take it out in poetry than in person if you want to keep the friend ;)

    I really like the last stanza, especially the last two lines:

    "You are so mean to everyone
    Always calling people names
    I am sorry, dear, dear, friend.
    Quit playing your childish little games."

    It wraps it up well, and it's probably the best written bit of all of it. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Emily

    You don't sound like a bad friend. . .
    If I say I feel this way about my sister, THAT makes me a bad person, lol. But I can relate to everything you say, people getting whatever they want when they don't deserve it, people being bossy, while smart people like me and you work and still don't get what they have.

    Great Work, 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This seems like my sister... Love this poem!!! I'ma add u to my favorites :) 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I'm sorry to say this but despite your angry little rant there, the only thing it conveyed to me was that you are the childish one. The "I hate you" and "jump off a cliff" remarks demonstrate this even more. I apologise if this disappoints you but I’m just being honest. Nevertheless, I hope you feel better after that rant.

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    Don't let one person's negative opinion get you down. No, I don't think you're childish. I think writing is a very unchildish way of getting rid of emotions that are better not expressed outwardly sometimes.

  • 17 years ago

    by Biscuit

    I have a friend just like this! great to see im not the only one who has to suffer!! i would say this poem is a very accurate portrayal of your emotions, i can sympathisise completely

    -biscuit-

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Hahaha, this made me laugh.
    And I agree it's good to take out your anger in poetry.
    5/5