Weaving spiderweb poison,
Through emaciated veins,
Handcuffed needle hands,
....search me.
[Loved that part so much.]

I also thought that the last line went really well, it was really strong. Again, this was fantastic, you're probably sick of hearing me say the same thing over and over again. But I can never find anything wrong with your work, I always love it. It was a well written piece. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

I can honestly say I have never seen a poem like this before..it was very different but also unique..The imagery was great and you portrayed the image wonderfully..You did a great job on it, it was wonder ful! 5/5

Brillant vocabulary, I think it gave it more of an image. Your descriptions were metaphorically beautiful, and each line had it's own beauty and meaning. I love your short lines because it makes a great effect, also when the next line has the '...' and pulls everything together. My favorite so far. Just... magnificent. You are talented.

Great write! Terrific and deep emotion! Loved it. Keep up the writing. 5/5 =)

Samantha

Excellent, this one was also very unique! The discription was put so very well, and it flowed beautifully.
I loved it.....
-annmarie

I love the deep and dark feel that this has.

Weaving spiderweb poison,
Through emaciated veins

Absolutely adorre these lines. In fact loved the choice of words throughout.
Only thing I'm not sure about is the indented lines they just seemed a bit of a harsh pause to the poem and personally I'm not sure.

This is one of your best... A great imagary and everything. Great job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Wow, that was a very mind boggling poem. I really had trouble making sense of it, but after reading it over again, I kind of got something. Not quite sure if it's the same meaning as you, but I got something.

5/5.. Again words didnt make sense but I really liked how you put that so I had to give you a 5/5

As vivid and personal as a nightmare...love it!

Pretty good, I didn't quite understand the whole thing though. Maybe you can find a way to keeping writing this style but also making it less complex. Great vocab

Its filled with so much emotions! I wonder if I can ever match you. Hahaha. Great one. I enjoyed it thoroughly.

I`m not really sure that I get the meaning of this, although I think I know what its referring to. I enjoyed the challenge to my mind though.

The language is great and i love the imagery it creates.

-biscuit-

I'd wager good money that I get a different message as a reader than you get as the poet. If I read it again then I am sure I'd get a different vision again.

That can only be a good thing.

Bret