I agree with you ;; this in fact, does not need an ending. I think you wrote this beautifully, wonderful job. The flow was perfect and didn`t seem at all forced. You`re a great writer ;; keep it up! 5/5
Wow.. this peom was so unique, and different it was beautiful, i loved your style of writting, and the brackets made it your own, great write... please read and comment on some of my poems, thanks ...Kirsty Palmer xx
Yeah, i don't think it needs more of an ending - you don't measure the worth of poems by how long they are. yours is unique and original, and well executed. maybe it doesn't fit in a specific style, but who cares? it keeps to its own patterns. that's a cool thing about poetry - rules are there to be broken, eh? : )
You really did well on this poem. I thought it was creative having those words in brackets. They did stand out, on their own, but together it also held another meaning. Great job this this poem. You described everything so well, it was easy to imagine. I saw the colours best.