Comments : I Can't Go There

  • 11 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    I Loved the way you used your imagination

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow, Kaylee. This was beautiful. I also liked how you put certain parts of the poem in brackets. But I think I've said that to you in another poem, tehe. Excellent wording though with this one, such a short piece, but you chose the right wording to help it become stronger. Very well done. =D 5/5

    Natalie``

    {P.S. I'm sooo happy that you're trying to get a book together, tehe. If you end up writing a book. I wanna be the first to buy it. =D Lol..And I can't get anything published, lol.. my poems would need alot of work done to them before I could even think about that. =P}

  • 11 years ago

    by MemoirsOfMe

    Second poem I've read of yours, and I've noticed you have a way of making things flow that others don't use. I think the brackets made a great effect on the poem. The words were beautiful, and very vivid, I could see what you were explaining, even feel. Bravo!

  • 11 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    Hmmm this one was pretty confusing? What kind of poem is it? It just sort of seemed all over the place, it needs an ending.........

    -AnnMarie

  • 11 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    This one made me feel a bit sad. You are quite right in that the words speak for themselves.
    I loved the way you bracketed the parts that aren't directly related to nature. I think that helped to isolate the feeling of the poem from the scene well.
    I guess overall it has a kind of melancholy quality and for such a short poem it expresses a lot.

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    You really did well on this poem. I thought it was creative having those words in brackets. They did stand out, on their own, but together it also held another meaning. Great job this this poem. You described everything so well, it was easy to imagine. I saw the colours best.

  • 11 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Yeah, i don't think it needs more of an ending - you don't measure the worth of poems by how long they are. yours is unique and original, and well executed. maybe it doesn't fit in a specific style, but who cares? it keeps to its own patterns. that's a cool thing about poetry - rules are there to be broken, eh? : )

  • 11 years ago

    by Kirsty palmer

    Wow.. this peom was so unique, and different it was beautiful, i loved your style of writting, and the brackets made it your own, great write... please read and comment on some of my poems, thanks ...Kirsty Palmer xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Kaylee --
    I agree with you ;; this in fact, does not need an ending. I think you wrote this beautifully, wonderful job. The flow was perfect and didn`t seem at all forced. You`re a great writer ;; keep it up! 5/5

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

  • 11 years ago

    by celina

    This poem was so good i liked it a lot
    well good luck with others!!!!!!!

    much love celina