Hush

by Kaylee   Jul 26, 2006


Metronome heart marked,
Binding indentured leash,
Talon doubt fractured eye,
Blinded morale inside,

Secluded prints soiled,
Crude unadorned skin,
Thirst craved fingertips,
Traced the spinal cord,

........Hush. It's our secret.
.........We must never tell.

Grieved rejected-Stained,
Mourned crestfallen sight,
Lacerated soul distressed,
Blackout-Lost recollection,

Impaired beyound belief,
Invaded thoughts pound,
A Bruised skelatal frame,
Find no fault, this I pray,

........Hush. It's our secret.
.........We must never tell.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Dear Kaylee,

    I learnt some new words from you. Thanks for the same. You simply rock. Sometimes I do feel from where does a teen like you get such great thoughts. Anyways, 5/5 of course.

  • I really like this and can see a talent, unfortuantaley i didnt really understand the message u were trying to convey but i like the mystery of it, well done

    xxxxxxxxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Excellent job, if a person really tries to think more on the deeper side, they'll be able to get what you're talking about.
    To me: it's a poem about broken love
    "Crude unadorned skin
    Thirst craved fingertips"
    -Reminds me about lust

    Grieved rejected-Stained,
    Mourned crestfallen sight,
    Lacerated soul distressed,
    Blackout-Lost recollection (memories that cause sadness and joy)

  • 11 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    Again I didnt get what you were talking about but I learned more words *ill look them up in a dictionary later* But the way you used them was great so 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    I really liked this poem, it was very different than the stuff I normally read and I appreciate this. Your word choices were emaculate (sp?). The only thing I can criticise on is instead of putting all the periods before "Hush. It's our secret." and "We must never tell." I think that it would look a little bit better if you decided to put them in brackets instead. Other than that I loved this poem. Way to go