Comments : Say goodbye

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    "I love you more then life"
    [more 'that' life]

    "I live you more then death"
    [Not quite sure what you are trying to say in this line. Live = Love?]

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Sorry.. the rest of my comment got cut off.. Just wanted to say it was a good piece. Keep on writing, but make sure you edit your work.

  • 17 years ago

    by christina marie

    Oh wow! Loved this piece! Omgawsh, it gave me shivers. The good ones, mind you! I believe YOU should be the famous one. =)

    LOVE LOLLI

  • 17 years ago

    by ABrookeD

    Aside from a few mistakes, this was a great poem. It is sad, but i like it. You have a good rhyme going. Keep it up.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mycquel

    That poem really gave me goose bumps! very sad yet its reality which makes it worse! the poem itself was great! alot of emotion! and thanx for commenting and rating one of mine..appreciate it

  • 17 years ago

    by Chrissie

    Gawjuss poem..great writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Roxy

    I'm really in love with your poems. I just can't get away from them their so deep and when I read them I feel as though they where written out for me. I feel the same way at the moment my friends in coma =[
    xx Rox xx