Wow. This poem is so powerful, the words are so...so unused.I mean like i hardly ever hear the words "fervent" and "disfiled". I think its excellent how you used such words, it really takes the poem to the next step. 5/5
&& If you can comment on a(my) poem(s) I would really appreciate it.
WOW. I didn`t read the comments people left you, but did anyone mention that you`re very well spoken? Well, you are. Your vocabulary is very vivid ;; it`s wonderful. How old are you? You did a great job on this, flow and all. Great job, and God bless. 5/5
Wow. Very nicely done, Kaylee. I looked up a few words from this poem to find out what they meant, and now the poem makes alot more sense. A very strong emotional poem here. With excellent vocab. Loved it!! 5/5
O.O You know all those words?! Lol. Great write. It really brought out how you feel and how people see you as. There was no rhyiming, but that was most likely intentional lol. Flow was great throughout the whole poem, even though it was a tad bit short. 5/5 =) xoxo
12 years ago
Wow, you have such a great vocabulary and have the tallent to use to words you know in your writing. Powerful write, great job.
I have been your fan for quite a long time. Never tried to comment earlier so really for that. By the way its a very well written poem with rich use of vocabulary. But I have an advice, kindly write a synopsis of this poem below since a common reader might find it difficult to understand the concept. Just an advice.
Err, this doesnt really make sense to me... 'rohypnol'?? is that even a word? these sentences seem to be in random fragments and they dont really flow....im sure this would be a lot better if i knew what it was about but i really cant work it out :(
I hope this poem is written soully for your own satisfactin. I can get maybe a glimpse of what you want to convey but you've veiled the message in so much ambiguity that it's impossible to get everything a reader needs to enjoy the poem properly.
The word works, don't get me wrong but I think you could have done a better job of getting your story out.
I had the same problem, check out my first five poems and you'll see what I mean. It was a hard pill to swallow but I soon learned that being clever with words and phrases (with rohypnol salted tongue is genius) doesn't necvessarily make for a perfect poem.