[First I would eliminte the a and if the sky is a clear blue then we can assume it is already a gentle day. I would also eliminte the word the which reminds readers this is only a poem.]

[Take out the second a"

A drop of rain,
Touch of breeze,

etc]

[And the same thing through your poem just eliminate your unneeded words]

I like the whole silent serenity type theme it goes good with this poemm....

I thought that this one was very good, different and unique it was really nice! Great job!!

-ann

Wow, i really did like this one. It seemed so powerful and conveyed the power of nature and i could really feel the weather. Great work.

--Steph

Very nicely done! I love how in the first stanza it's "A blue clear sky" and in the last stanza it's "A clear blue sky"-it gave the poem a twist! :-) The rhyme works well;the flow is on target! The only error I found is in this line:

"A presumptuous strorm"

Storm is mispelled---
Amazing write! 5/5 Keep it up-

I loved the tone of this poem. It flowed so well, it is almost musical. Great job. 5/5 Loretta

Good strong rhythm and brilliant rhyming but 'shutter the leaves'?? wot duz tht mean?

i like the way the end reflects the beginning, with 'blue clear sky' and 'clear blue sky'

-biscuit-

Wonderful job, your style is unique and very serene.

And as for my low votes like 4.4 you were wondering about, it's all caused by the same person.

Very good nature poem. i could never write a nature poem.. it seems hard.. but you did a great job.

This is a simple nature poem, doesn't have anything vastly different to many other nature poems. The rhyme however was very good and it flowed well. Not bad for the simplicity.

The clear blue sky,
Is gone today,
Taken by storm,
Where the remain now lays.

So very true!

Imagery was great you kept time all the while i could have promised you that i felt some rain on me!
=D

I normally don't like nature or scenic poems. However, you paint the picture so well.I also read your poem aloud to a few other people(hope you don't mind)they were stunned at the quality of your writing ability.