Wow this was a good poem, the message got through real good and it flowed well.

The short linds and the long stanzas really had a slow pace to the poem which really worked in this. this is jsut a suggestion, but you should try to use other kind of punctuatuions other than periods and commas. 5/5

AWh. This is like sad and sweet in a mixture. It's a really good poem. I like it. I thought the flow was amazing. I give it a five Hun. :]

Wow, Even though this is a really sad poem, it's great cause it also tells a little story of two peoples love growing. I loved this. It's very different to most your work, too. I don't think I'd change anything, I liked this just the way it is. =) 5/5

Natalie``

Natalie was right this is a great poem and a great messege yeah a sad but then i love the ending the flow of the line and the quit rhyme good job

5/5

Geneross

This is good it really told a story of a journey two people go through... To make it better I think you could split the stanzas differently to improve the flow..
- Polly

Great poem and nice job ending it. One thing, the last line of the first stanza doesn't flow as well as the others. Keep it up

I felt the flow of this was a little rocky but it certainly had depth and feeling. It felt sad but also kinda hopeful.

Aww! It's cute! I love it! Although, in the first stanza, I thought the last line seemed a little forced and 'to pay the cost' I didn't think made much sense. Great flow in most of it. 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

You have such a great talent for writing it is so wonderful to read thank you so much for sharing it

Awww, this was sweet.. Although I did find it a little confusing.. Maybe that is just me though, lol.. the descriptions were great and described what they were supposed to.. The flow was good and the emotion and love you feel is clear.. nicely done! 5/5

I like this it is good 5/5

I loved it, it was great if u get into a giving mood read some of my poems!
~libby~

ITS SO NICE TO READ SOMETHING SO GOOD

I really don't belive in love because it hurts so much so it's no point in beliving in it

She heard him be raped,
He came to her and cried,
They comforted each other,
Or so they tried.
You should get your stuff published this is amazing!!!!!!

Reminds me of my relationships i like the realness (if its a word) of it