Comments : Lies Hurt

  • 17 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Hey! i have one suggestion to make. the line "The two parties that is involved" should be changed to "are involved," so that the numbers agree. good job on this poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    Short but sweet. Having recently been a 3rd party to such an event (warring, related neighbours) I can say with some certaintly that this poem harbours enough delicate ambiguity that there will be many MANY of us out here that can interpret it into a situation of our own at some point in our lives!

  • 16 years ago

    by Synh

    'Which simply put ~ he told a lie.'

    About that sentence... who is 'he'? What did he lie about? And why is the family now destroyed because of it?

    And, I think that sentence is just a repeat of the sentence before it. You said he didn't tell the truth already, so why tell the reader 'he told a lie'? If he didn't tell the truth, then obviously he lied.

    Sorry, but I wasn't to fond of this poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Katie

    I like this one personally. Mostly because you made it so the readers have to fill in the pieces and assume what happened and what everything means. Also, because it's short and has so much meaning packed into it. Love it.

  • 16 years ago

    by kimberly

    Family is hard but having heart will get you threw anything! Have a great night!

  • 16 years ago

    by oNice

    Sad but true. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Yea seriously lies ruin everything.. as they say honesty is the best policy.. nice job writing about it!.. i really enjoyed reading it.. keep it up =)