Comments : A Sad Little Girl

  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    I can definitely relate to this alot. and I just loved how you ended it with the same stanza. i think it brought the whole thing together 10 times more. it was wonderful but sad at the same time. great job babe. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Awe, wow. Jessy! This was so sad. Loved how you repeated the same stanza at the start and finish. T'was great!

    You had a great flow aswell, and the rhyming didn't seem forced AND I loved your choice of wording.

    A very well written emotional piece. Keep it up! Ily. 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Very well written Jessy. I really liked this poem. You described everything well, and the words created an atmosphere of sadness. Wow, it was great. Seemed short, but it was still good :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Sophie

    Wonderful work.
    very sad.
    loved the repeated stanza had a great effect.

    keep up the good work!

    sophie:)

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Great job. Weight means TOO much to people nowadays.

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Awwwwww...thts sooo sad...i lik it.. a 5/5 again!! ur really good poet..

  • SO sad! i hope the girl in the poem is not you, if it is and u need to talk im here, kk?
    love mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    Aww amazing. i can relate to this!!! wonderful write. wow you really can write, so dont everr stop. this is sad but it is excellent!

  • 17 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Wow, my life story.
    definitly can relate alot.
    it brings back alot of memories
    Very very good.
    so sad,
    i loved it.
    amberinaa*

  • 17 years ago

    by MeganLeigh

    I really like this poem. I givve it a 5/5

    It would mean a lot if you would check out and comment on my poems. Thx. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Maddy

    That was amazing!!
    So touching and real.

  • 17 years ago

    by i love ben!!

    Awwh...thats sad...i can relate well though...i went through something like that...i loved it though...5/5!! great job

    [+broken+]

  • 17 years ago

    by Aussie

    Gr8 poem. it has alot of emotions. rythme gos nicely. keep writing

  • 17 years ago

    by χ-я.ι.α-χ

    Its a good peom..but somethings not right with the flow of it..its not very natural..but its still good. very sad..whats with you writting about fat people, huh? this better not be about you.! lol. anyways..good poem. but maybe work a little more on the flow of it.