Very nice poem girly! I like it. But i don't understand the ending. WHAT WAS THE GIFT?!!?!?! My first thought was that the girl is pregnant too. But it was a very good poem. Nice Write.

~^_^Anthony^_^~

Wow... simply wonderful.uniquely wonderful

I apsolutely love the structure of this poem..
so different.. so unique.
you have great talent.. keep up the good work my friend.. xo

WOW;; THAT`S REALLY SAD! iT`S A VERY GOOD WELL-WRiTTEN POEM AND iT HAS A MESSAGE iN iT. AMAZiNG POEM!

x3-------SHELBY

Hey!
I love this poem! i love the sturcture of this poem!very uniquely amazing! I love it! 5/5

Keep Smiling
And
Keep Writing

-*-Tormented

Wow...breathtaking...that was great.

Awwww... i don't know if this really happend to u but if so i'm very sorry. i love a boy but he's only a couple months older than me and i love him and he love a nother gurl. anyways i love u'r poem i can feel the love. And how u decribed it very, very good!!! i give u a 5/5 very well keep ^ the good work!!!

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sign, Rosie
good luck

Wow.. this is one of the very few poems that actually get my heart pumping. I was.. am.. speechless. That is so very heart wrenching I can barely stand to even think about it.. not the the poem, the situation i nthe poem. Wow. I sincerely hope thats not true. But I love how you wrote it. Like a story from both point of views. That's pure genius. Wow... Kudos.

I like this poem, I really love how you wrote it. :) 5/5

That's a really great poem! I loved it.

Pretty amazing...really shows both sides and in a very unique way...keep it up!

Absolutely GORGEOUSLY written! rich in emotion and... just GREAT! 5/5

well done!

This had me on the edge of my seat all the way until the end. It's so sad, he loved her but he couldn't be with her. Awwww... I kind of feel sorry for the bride too a little bit (but just a little). I really enjoyed this piece.

I really enjoyed this for different reasons. I liked how you have two separate characters speaking. This is the first piece I've read ever on this site that is able to pull this off which is impressive. I also liked the scenario and how you create characters with depth despite only having a short space to work with. It doesn't sound cliched at all and all the lines fit in perfectly. I was also impressed with how much detail you put in despite only having two lines for each stanza. The only part I did not understand was which girl was pregnant. Excellent stuff anyways, I liked it.

-Ariana

That was deep.. very deep. It felt very realistic the way it is written.. Really great peice of writing (:

That was dope good poem atomic I remember you you stop writing poetry for a little then came back good to see real writing again :)