I like the way the poem reads somewhat like an old english poem but is very profond to the point of being over my head

First I want to say that the title was beautiful and mysterious. Being an original title, I enjoyed it and knew the poem would be a good read. I liked how you had opposites of a kitchen with you being in the middle and how you described yourself as a leaf: Though whether it meant feeling small or something else entirely I'm not sure. I loved your final stanza, as it reminded me of a marriage for some reason. Especially the platinum which to me seemed like rings and newlyweds but I ould be wrong. Excellent write.

Very beautiful.... I love how yo write. You have such strong imagery and something about your poems is just wonderful. Great job.

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I think it was very absrtact and very beautiful. the flow was quite nice and the whole poem had a ....pristine sorta feel abotu it. really sweet. i do feel, however that i have absolutely no idea what it's about. lol

I love the word usage here. i think it's perfect :) great job.

Wow great poem. its really nice. keep it up. 5/5

If you DIDN'T understand the poem as well as you would have liked, please read the following and I hope it helps.

The trees describe my parents (Chestnut and Oak are from the same tree family, coincidence?) and so I am the leaf in the centre. The kitchen is believed to be the heart of the home (family/love/home etc.)

A maiden is an unmarried woman (me). Wig means hair and she cut off her curls (representing childhood) to grow up and become independent. She’s “cold” and “ripening to step away” because she’s finding her feet without her parents but remembering she needs to be independent for a reason.

”He” is my Fiancé. Him holding his breath just means he is cautiously but respectfully taking me off my parents’ hands (old fashioned I know). They watchfully lean our way to give us guidance, love, and support as parents do.

The final stanza is about getting married. My Fiancé and I get married and then the kitchen (family love) is spread to both of us as we look forward to spending time as a big family. But, at the same time my parents leave it to the newly weds to have their own life as well.

That is more or less the full meaning of the poem. Some parts may have another or deeper meaning to you, and please got with that, but as the poet this is what I intended it to mean.

Oh, a very deep poem, one of the deepest that i have ever read,
very well done, i like it alot. great job

Oh, a very deep poem, one of the deepest that i have ever read,
very well done, i like it alot. great job

I like it. your careful with your words and dont let them go lightly like so many do. the placement is thought through. that is true talent.