Comments : Reminding Me

  • 17 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Ooo! I loved it! The flow...the words...almost everything! Lol. I just have a suggestion.

    [I've sat and watched the tide
    On this sandy, lonely beach
    The crashing of these waves
    Keeping all things out of reach]

    I think the last line should be:

    [Keeping all things from reach]

    I just thought it might make the flow a little better. =)

    Okies...the poem lol. It was heartbreaking! I absolutely adored it! The feelings jumped out to me. I know exactly how you feel, and you're not alone. Although, your rhymes do seem a little easier than they could've been, it was still well written. =) Excellent job! 4.5/5 (I round up for votes) xoxo

    Samantha

  • 17 years ago

    by Jin

    Awwwhh..... very sweet & sad =) Gave me goosebumps.. very good flow of course, and good imagery. Nice Job , keep up the great works!!!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by timehealsallwounds6

    This is an amazing poem i absoulty love it

  • 17 years ago

    by Allis MT

    This is an super awesome poem! my favorite like was when you said "the arrow found it's mark" a definite 5/5 because i can totally relate to this. This gave very good imagery too!!

    plz comment any of mine thakns!

    go socal!

  • 17 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    Emotion and depth stood out in this one. Depth in all of your poems, of course. Talented kid. Good work. 4.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Erin

    Wow im speachless where did u get this talent ...... who aree u...hahah loved it xoxo Erin

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Very creative
    good imagery
    nice vocabulary
    can you do anything wrong?
    nice work