This poem has a simple eligance to it that makes it quite interesting. I enjoyed reading it even though it was short.

Well written great work

Hey great poem!
i love reading 'dark' poems, but i cant really write them!
wonderful job
love mel

Oh! ok, that makes so much more sense. i read the poem through an entire time thinking "figures" said "fingers." doh. sorry about that. this is a good poem! spooky

Oooh. woweee-- Jessy! This was really dark. Loved it! All the details and imagry were great in this. Def. a 5/5 from meeee. =D Keep it up!

Natalie``

I really liked this. just one thing the last sentence doesn't really rhyme that much to me. the rest of flowed really well. and you wrote it beautifully. Maybe you could just like change a word or two, might make more sense. but either way i lvoed it, it was great!

Normally I'd like poems to be a bit longer, but I liked this one Jess because you used the right choice of words to make it seem like we were reading a poem with about 5 stanzas, but there were only 2...thats awesome I love it!
Krissey

I don't think I've read such an eerie poem before. Good job! I love to see you writing about new things and trying new styles. That's awesome!

Keep it up hunn.
Much Love,
Sarah-Joy

I liked this poem dark but well written keep it up 5/5 from me

Very nicely written.. Very dark and sinister; just the way I Love it. You seem to have gotten downrated on this poem -- it's not a 4.5. Just remember you did very well on this poem. The lowest it should have ever gotten was a 4.9. But good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Good work Jessy!

nice and captivating poem

lovely work

sophie:)

Wow ... everything flowed REALLY well and even though it was short it was a really captivating poem that caught my attention...keep up the good work chica!!!!!!

*~*xxBaBi_GrrLxx*~*

You use the word angrily but then describe them as happy. Such a big contrast with nothing between the too. You may also want to limit words ending in -ly, for some reason they just throw some poems off. The rest of the poem was good though for some of your descriptions.