His suppose to die tonight, from her poisoned bite
(('He's' not his))
Words appear on the glass, saying"you better run fast"
((I loved these lines..))

This is an excellent poem.. Absolutely amazing for your age; it has amazing flow and tells such a story great job!

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

TOh, thanks I'll make the correction

Oops, meant to put that once:p

WOW! THAT`S AMAZiNG! iT`S SAD AND SCARY AT THE SAME TiME. i FEEL BAD FOR HER AND HiM BECAUSE HE WAS SO UOSET THAT HiS WiFE WAS KiLLiNG HiM THAT HE KiLLED HER TOO. EXCELLENT STORY AND GOOD RHYMiNG!

x3-------SHELBY

Wow, that's an awesome description of pain and hurt... I just don't know how to put it into words! Basically, wonderful job and keep up the good work!

Yeah, your poem was amazing...!! I could perfectly imagine the whole poem with your awesome descriptions. Great work on this; I give you a 5/5, of course. Keep writing!
Best wishes,

TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

Hey this was great! It was a great idea and it was extremely well written. you really have talent.

thanks for the comment xxxx

Great description, such emotion, dont know why this poem has such a low rating!!!! great effort keep up the work...

Awesome poem. like ppl other ppl have said great description and emotion. truely amazing.

This is a fantastic write, your descriptions were so vivid. It was almost like being able to see it in picture form whilst reading the words. Clever rhyming too. I liked this very much.
Well done
K xx

Vivid imagery! very well written and tells a great story! nice work.