Comments : Vampire's Death

  • 11 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    His suppose to die tonight, from her poisoned bite
    (('He's' not his))
    Words appear on the glass, saying"you better run fast"
    ((I loved these lines..))

    This is an excellent poem.. Absolutely amazing for your age; it has amazing flow and tells such a story great job!

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 11 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    TOh, thanks I'll make the correction

  • 11 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Oops, meant to put that once:p

  • 11 years ago

    by TRAGiC BEAUTY

    WOW! THAT`S AMAZiNG! iT`S SAD AND SCARY AT THE SAME TiME. i FEEL BAD FOR HER AND HiM BECAUSE HE WAS SO UOSET THAT HiS WiFE WAS KiLLiNG HiM THAT HE KiLLED HER TOO. EXCELLENT STORY AND GOOD RHYMiNG!

    x3-------SHELBY

  • 11 years ago

    by Jax x lyn

    Wow, that's an awesome description of pain and hurt... I just don't know how to put it into words! Basically, wonderful job and keep up the good work!

  • 11 years ago

    by TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

    Yeah, your poem was amazing...!! I could perfectly imagine the whole poem with your awesome descriptions. Great work on this; I give you a 5/5, of course. Keep writing!
    Best wishes,

    TILLmyLASTtearFALLS

  • 11 years ago

    by lonelynow

    Hey this was great! It was a great idea and it was extremely well written. you really have talent.

    thanks for the comment xxxx

  • Great description, such emotion, dont know why this poem has such a low rating!!!! great effort keep up the work...

  • 10 years ago

    by coupon can

    Awesome poem. like ppl other ppl have said great description and emotion. truely amazing.

  • 10 years ago

    by Katie

    This is a fantastic write, your descriptions were so vivid. It was almost like being able to see it in picture form whilst reading the words. Clever rhyming too. I liked this very much.
    Well done
    K xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Somber Esprit

    Vivid imagery! very well written and tells a great story! nice work.