Comments : CRY after CRY

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Honestly i really enjoy reading your poems, they are full of great emotions and deep feelings, you are so great,
    keep writting so i could read more of your great poems,

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Beautiful poem, great rhythm. Only one small thing, please capitalize your "I" ^-^ good JOb

  • 17 years ago

    by Misstress

    Again, full of emotions on this one
    Keep on writing...

  • 17 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    Aww that is such a sad poem but very nice and well written. keep it up.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    Full of emotions, yes, but rarely does one line rush to the reader. I could nt get a feeling form this. Maybe instead of repeating, "Cry after cry. Tear after tear" you could use some more descriptive words about what it feels like to be abused, watch everyday people who are not abused, etc.

  • 17 years ago

    by Joaddan Lira

    I love your poems....i loved this poem...its os sad...but so true

  • 17 years ago

    by Letty

    This is so sad...But I loved it. Your
    writting reminds so much of mine. I can
    actually feel your pain when I read it.
    I too ask myself on a daily basis those
    same questions. but when I see other
    people out there like me It gives me a
    reason to be strong and makes me
    want to try even harder so that I can
    show them a better way. Thank you
    for sharing your gift.

    Love ya
    Letty

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I ask myself this all the time
    I feel like im not worth a dime
    ((I did not like these lines at all.. They really took away from how well the rest was written.))

    But great job. Strong in emotion, again; great job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    There were some spelling mistakes and it could be more organized. Other then that it was really good. Keep up the goodl work. *5/5*

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    Very good poem, great flow, 5/5!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good start. The ending was nice. The beginning can have shorter lines. The thing you need to concentrate on is imagery. Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Another good poem, I liked the title. The rhymes were good and the flow was ok. Keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow very emotional write. I loved it. Great Job!! The flow and structure were both great.

    I do believe this word, "last" should be changed to "lasts" in this line, "but that one smile only last a while" so it would read, "but that one smile only lasts a while"

    Other than that, wonderful job, I really liked it. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Great job!
    Keep up the great work.
    5/5 God Bless

    ~*tay*~

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow that's really good you have talent
    especially those

    cry after cry
    tear after tear
    why cant I die
    why am I here?

    Good job

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    So few words yet the feeling is so so strong, well done. i have to say, you pulled it off brilliantly!

    bravo! 5/5 david

  • 17 years ago

    by stefanie

    This poem is really good. i can relate to it. the emotion coming out of it is strong and it speaks out to me. i like it a lot. good job