Looking into your eyes

by deeplydesturbed   Sep 9, 2006


I look into your eyes
wondering why I see
the things that I do
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes
and I see pain and sorrow,
love and hate,
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes.
All I see is your dad and mum
and a picture of me
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes.
I see the terror .
I pull out the knife
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes
as I stab you in the chest.
I see all the pain
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes
as your lips curl
into a huge smile
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes.
I see the thank you
you give for saving your life
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes:
cold and dark and lifeless.
I see peace and love
as I look into your eyes.

I look into your eyes
and for the last time
I see your troubles die
as I look into your eyes.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Lucifer

    I look into your eyes, I see a beautiful soul trying to hide herself in the darkness.
    You should be in the light guiding others.

  • 7 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Below is your poem with suggested corrections:

    I look into your eyes
    wondering why I see
    the things that I do
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes
    and I see pain and sorrow,
    love and hate,
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes.
    All I see is your dad and mum
    and a picture of me
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes.
    I see the terror .
    I pull out the knife
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes
    as I stab you in the chest.
    I see all the pain
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes
    as your lips curl
    into a huge smile
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes.
    I see the thank you
    you give for saving your life
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes:
    cold and dark and lifeless.
    I see peace and love
    as I look into your eyes.

    I look into your eyes
    and for the last time
    I see your troubles die
    as I look into your eyes.

    I will say I originally didn't like all the "look into your eyes" as I went through before just correcting all the lowercase "I"s, but this was actually a very unique poem that benefitted from the repetition. Violent, yes; beautiful nonetheless. I very much so enjoy the last line!

    Comment 3 of 12.

    5/5
    IdTakeABulletForYou

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Im glad you enjoyed :)
      There was a lot of lower case. Not bad for something so long ago thouģh

  • 17 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Ummm, your name isn't a joke...that was honestly disturbing! I mean, as odd as this is, I did like how you worded it and I liked how it repeated itself, but still a little different. Lol, hope you understand, heehee. But keep it up!
    ~Jules

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