Marvelous poem. Short but says a lot. I always wanted to try a Cinquain but I thought it would be too hard but you made it seem so easy. I'm impressed how in this short poem you still were able to describe the words, like "Stained tears" and "perfect eyes". That shows extreme talent. Excellent job.[5/5]

I like it... It's a bit confusing, in my opinion, but your word choice is very strong for the way you told the story. Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Oh it's so hard to write a long comment when everyone has already said everything! lol. well.. i agree with it all.. with such a short poem you expressed great emotion and your use of words is great. Keep it up. =] 5/5

Stained tears,
(I really loved this line! To me, it was a new way of saying the typical crimson tears. I liked it, it was unique. And it was a great opening line for this poem.)
From perfect eyes,
Can never hide the truth,
(I also really loved these lines because it made me think of how people are often over looked. Like, they won't understand them, and tears from perfect eyes can never hide the truth is like a new way of saying don't over look people, lol. That may have confused you the way i worded that? Anyways, those were very strong lines.)
That she's simply crying for help,
Alone.
(Loved these two lines! They made me think about how even the best people are alone sometimes and even the best fall down...which is like a poem I am currently working on about a friend of mine. But yeah, I really loved it, and the ending line was just perfect for this poem, it really wrapped it all up nicely!)

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. You are a very talented writer Natalie! Keep up the good work! 5/5 =]

-Jenna.

11th September 2006
Copyright (C) Natalie.

Sorry about the last part with your copyright thinger on there lol, i just copied and pasted your poem into the comment box, and guess i got that part in there too. Lol, whoops. -Blushes.

-Jenna.

Hmm, I'm not good at formed poetry. I've only manage to write one. An acrostic. I don't think I will ever write in these forms. I leave them to you :)

This type of poem seems to be very popular on the site right now, but it is also difficult to do. I enjoyed reading yours because it was written well and showed you ablity to shape and control language. A new poem hun.

-Tainted Miko

Wow, very emotional. keep writing5/5

Good job. Are they still downvoting you..%$&* them! Keep your head up girl!

Another great job, they all said their feelings about it that is why i think no word left for me to describe this wonderful poem with, once again one of the best job.5/5

Neeki I love this poem because I can relate to it and I am not lying. I know what it's like to cry for help but be alone.

You write so beautifully with haunted words that stand out.