I liked this but I'm not sure if I got the message... Is this like a war, and your laying on the battlefield dying... you thought it was a game... and now its gone too far... im not quite sure... the apple bitten was that like poison ... i think for a titles... :
Game Too Far
Poisoned Life
Soilders Play...

anyways this made me think of like a future poem i might write so... i give you a 5/5 :) great job

Nice dark poem love.
It was short and rhymed lovely.
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