Comments : Just Friends

  • 17 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I like the way you express your true feelings seemingly honestly straight from the heart

  • 17 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    This is a sweet poem...a nice new topic...good raw emotion in this poem and a nice way with your words....

  • 17 years ago

    by mike

    I really like it marcus.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kassie

    Hey. that was good.... keep writing.

  • 17 years ago

    by hippiehxc

    2 words..So sweet...I love it.

    X3Grace

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Pretty good job. Nice descriptions and feelings.

    Your rhyme scheme changed in this poem. Also some of the rhymes didn't seem to work, they sounded forced. It would also help if you capitalized first letters in each line.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awwwhh, that was soo sweeet! I loved it.. The descriptions were just beautiful.. The flow worked well.. The love was great.. And I just loved it! Keep up the great work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    I loved your poem ao much and i swear i'm experiencing this right now and it's kindda hard...what is written in here are like meant for me!!!WOW AWESOME keep it up

  • Hey
    i really love this poem its really good
    i can really relate to it

    Why must we be just friends and nothing more
    our feelings for each other are so strong
    that is something you know is true and can't ignore
    if we was to give us a try it would last so long

    is my favourite part

    keep up the good work
    ily.xox

  • 17 years ago

    by endless tears

    Awwww.... man that poem was BOMB..
    that was exillent..
    i really liked reading it..
    so plz read and commit one of mine as ive done for you..

  • 17 years ago

    by Porcelain

    Wow, this is excellent! keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    It's hard to write a comment when there are already so many and they all say everything lol. I definately agree with them all though. Its a really really good poem. I can definetely feel the emotions you are putting across. Very awesome poem. Keep it up. =]

  • 17 years ago

    by HumanAngel

    Very good....

  • 17 years ago

    by GreenxTea

    It was good, but i think it rhymed a little too much for my taste. it kind of got annoying after hearing the same rhyming pattern.

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    This part i loved alot:

    "When you are around it is heated like fire"

  • 17 years ago

    by X2892

    Great poem 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xXx3moBabe1507xXx

    Awww i really like this.....its touching.....*tear,tear* lol JK but im serious its really good

  • 17 years ago

    by Autuumnbree

    I like it and, it's a really good poem....GJ

  • 17 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    This was a really great awesome poem w/o a doubt! And the rhyming sheme was cool! It flowed very smooth. you are very talented indeed. and you should just tell that girl how u feel and show her this poem im sure she will feel extra special!

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    When you are around it is heated like fire
    ((I do not like this line...Reword it.))
    that is the way you inspire
    me to write this as a way to inquire
    ((Poor ...word choice? Yes, I think that is it.))

    * You broke the AAAA rhyme scheme into a ABAB rhyme scheme in the middle of the poem! Don't do that! It just shows you do not have enough vocabulary to support your words...And if you mean to do that... It really wrecked the poem.

    if we was to give us a try it would last so long
    ((If you were to give us a try... {Grammar mistake}))
    The girl I always see in my fantasy
    if I don't get you I might lose my sanity
    ((Sounds forced... Like you did not know what else to say, or did not have another word to rhyme with...))
    I feel like you have given me no chance
    to show you the true definition of romance
    nothing I could do to enhance;
    you because me and you are a perfect match
    and just so attached
    can't let go or break loose even if I wanted to
    why are you always fronting when you know I've always wanted you

    Even though we got a good bond that can't be broken
    I want to be more than friends and will always be hoping!
    ((Why did you break format? Of the four lines? Bad!!!! And the rhyming is all over the place...Why? That makes no sense!))
    I feel like you have given me no chance
    to show you the true definition of romance
    ((Nicely done.. I like these lines.))
    can't let go or break loose even if I wanted to
    why are you always fronting when you know I've always wanted you
    (( Ok, rapper... 'Fronting' is NOT a word you use in a love poem, tiger. Try a different word.))

    Even though we got a good bond that can't be broken
    I want to be more than friends and will always be hoping!
    ((Even though we *have* a good bond that can't be broken..))
    ((Broken and hoping doesn't rhyme very well.. they do not flow well together. And the last sentence does NOT make sense...To me..))

    Hope that helps... Tell me if you revise it and I will come back to critize!
    xDarkSuicidex