Comments : You

  • 17 years ago

    by Jochsey

    Exlcellent poem for a first go Dave. Great work

  • 17 years ago

    by shanai

    Hey thats a good poem, i cant wait till u get to ya 4 months, lolu remind me so much of me n jayden, n how i cant live with out him, when we broke up i couldnt look at another guy, n i still cant, i think he is the hottest guy to me, love is so funny love is AMAZING

  • 17 years ago

    by Static

    ... well done

  • 17 years ago

    by kiara

    Shes lucky 2 have u and it shows so much that you care 4 her alot

  • 17 years ago

    by Reggie Jay

    Great poem man...masiy is a lucky girl. Keep this up man, I gave you a 5.
    I liked it

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    I like your poems david, one thing though, dont use slabg like u, in poems, but this is a very good poem man, i give it a 5/5!!!! keep it up!!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by heather

    That's so sweet! i totally give that a 5. thanks for telling me to edit my last poem...lol..i dont know why it does that sometimes. weird...but yea thanks! niiiiiiiiiiice poem yet again!

  • 17 years ago

    by DavidBrendan

    I think you put so much emotion into a rhyming poem which is difficult because of rhyming restrictions but you managed it very well and the poem itself definitely had a certain style which was enjoyable. 5/5 Thank you btw for commenting my poems

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    My favourite of your's so far...beautifully written...well expressed, heaps of emotion.
    I loved the imagery and wording.
    Excellent work.

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Nice flow in this beautiful dedication to the one you love. Simple but very sweet. Good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    Really a good poem... i would've liked to see a little more to it, a few different words than what you had, more complicated and unique... it was a good poem, but it felt generic, my thing is to try and stand out, i look for poems that do that... but it was still good so i gave you 5/5 nice

  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    That's such a sweet poem, this girl is very lucky to have you.
    I see since when you wrote this you have improved so much, but this is great for your first poem, my first one sucked. =P Keep them coming. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 17 years ago

    by LovinMyLife

    Amazing. Awesome job! I loved it, it was so sweet and this girl is lucky to have you. buh-bye now!
    Burning~Wings

  • 17 years ago

    by Krzysztof J

    This poem, this is love, its all here, including the fear of losing that wich you love the most, it cant be better, because we cant define love only the hert can so i give 5/5 is wish i could give more for this poem deserves it :)))

  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This is a really really great poem!! i love it...good job!! 5/5...

    thanx 4 commenting my poems.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    Aww this poem is so touching. i loved it. This Maisy girl should be lucky that she has such an awesome guy who writes her poetry [: 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Rona

    Very lovely poem! I love how you wrote this! The flow was great! Please keep writing!
    Thanks =)

  • 17 years ago

    by Hebe

    I love it. It's so touching, you heard that before, but it's true. right from the heart. You write it beautiful.
    Keep going
    Hebe

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha

    Not bad. Good read. ;)

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Aw this is a really nice poem. Flows really well and I enjoyed reading it. 5/5

    marcella