Enchanted!!! (Retourne)

by Robert Gardiner   Sep 17, 2006


Enchanted!!! (Retourne)

Enchanted, is my heart, enshroud,
By you love, your beauty, divine.
I'm lifted up, amongst, the clouds.
Enraptured, is this heart, of mine.

By your love, your beauty, divine,
To heaven, each time, I'm taken.
Enamored, is my soul, with thine.
My passion, you have, awaken.

I'm lifted up, amongst, the clouds,
Whenever, your presence, I'm in.
You resound, rapture, all so loud.
Your rhapsody, I'm just, wrapped in.

Enraptured, is this heart, of mine,
By the wondrous splendor, of you.
You've captured, this being, of mine.
You, I've taken, a liking to!!!

Robert Gardiner
R.G.Love

As always, your comments and vote are greatly appreciated, thank you.

Retourne: A Retourne is a French poetry form wherein repetition is used, employed. It consist of four quatrains (four-line stanzas), with each line having eight syllables. The trick is though that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first.

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I wrote this Retourne in honor of "The Repetitive Forms Challenge:" http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/discussion/topic.html?topic_id=57725 as an example of and a attempt at a Retourne. Retourne don't have to rhyme, but I decided to challenge myself further by rhyming mine. Tell me if it's a good job at the form, but most of all a good poem

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  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Robert,

    I just love to read your poems. they always make me laugh out loud because they are so filled with joy for life and for women!
    I hope that in real life you are just as much fun to be with as in your poems!

    Take care sweetie,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Robert
    This poem is full of love and passion. I don't know anything about formed poetry....only what I enjoy when I read it....and I loved this piece.

    Enchanted, is my heart, enshroud,
    By you love, your beauty, divine.
    I'm lifted up, amongst, the clouds.
    Enraptured, is this heart, of mine.

    This stanza is excellent!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 17 years ago

    by Cuddles

    Good poem, great poem, wonderful poem... what's the difference but words? I love it. I haven't read your work in a while (my apologies) so it's nice to read one again. You did a beautiful job on this

  • 17 years ago

    by Poet

    I like it, it wuz good nice poem

  • 17 years ago

    by AshLetitia

    This is a brilliant poem and a truely beautiful style. Reminds me much of my mother's poetry. Her works are published somewhere. Anyway, you are truely talented. Keep 'em coming.
    Ash