True Love

hey well i think u have real talent! u prbly hear th@ alot! ne way, i think its great how you express your feelings like th@ alot of guys i know r afraid to. keep writing cuz i love to read poems, especially when i can't write. just the feeling is good enough. hopefully th@ made sense! i actually havent posted ne thing in awhile but i might soon its just i go thru some long times until i write some, such a busy world we live in! ne way great poem keep it up!

This brought a lump to my throat while reading through this sean. Your sensitive love for amber and your aching longing for her has been so clearly written, through every single line that it was as if you were peeking into my head and writing about me. I can totaly relate to everything in this piece, so much so that I found some of it quite painful to read. for someone as relativly young as you, your skill with words shows amazing promise. i so wish i could have had half your talent when i was your age! dont ever stop my friend, it would be a waste of a precious gift.
That first line, so sooo true. when your heart is besoted with someone so unique and special, words become a hinderance and sound clumsy when trying to give voice to the sensations that are churning away inside. you end up repeating the same words so many times like `beautiful, sweet` etc that they soon develope into a cliche and sound trite. `you make it easy to be myself` again brilliantly put. you know when you have found the right person when you can just be yourself around them, no pretences, no putting on a show because they love you for who YOU are, not what they want you to be. `true love` as you so rightly say.
`scared this was only a dream` oh the insecurites that go hand in hand with being in love. the fear and terror of losing something so magical that has made life an exillerating* experiance that jus the thought of it disappearing sends shudders down the spine. how the h@ll would i cope, how could I go back to how it was torment restless thoughts. but every couple at the begining of a relationship goes through it, they are perfectly natural feelings. all part of being human. but i seriously doubt that is going to happen as she has `promised to never leave`
`deep down inside my core` love that line. amber has gone inside you to the very crux of your soul. she couldnt go any deeper. again i know how that feels. its only when you are in love with someone do you realise how deep and sometimes apparently endless emotions can go. and its only when you are in love with someone and look back on your life before they appeared do you realise how empty and shallow your life was, how cold and uncaring the world is.
`watching beautiful Cali sunset` never having been to your country maybe im betraying my ignorance here sean but i assume you mean california, and if so i can picture that romantic image quite clearly having grown up watching tv programmes such as starsky and hutch,columbo, to name a few. seems like a wonderful place to be with a lover, walking along the beach hand in hand as a pacific `breeze` blows into your true love`s hair. wonderful imagery in those lines. makes me want to go there!
`we connect on many levels` isnt it wonderful when you are in love and discovering your partners many layers, realising the more you uncover how much more wonderful they become, how similar you two are and smiling constanly as they say things exactly how you would say them, thinking same thoughts etc. starting a sentence and them finishing it for you. and love the `boo`. why do we all do it? weve all been there giving our sweethearts pet names that if you had heard before your meeting you would have just thought `What? pass me the sickbag!`. but when submerged in the romace just trip off the tounge so naturaly you start to use them w/o even thinking about it. im sure Freud or some other psychologist could explain why but i love those little mysterys, keeps them enchanting and special.
Im rambling here so i will try to wind this comment up sean, but cant resist quoting a few more lines that i can personaly identify with `no harm will come your way` wanting to protect and shield your true love from all the crap and bulls*it that people and everyday life brings,`...kills you makes you stronger` such a true maxim, only affliction and suffering can build character.`can hardly believe your real` yes know that one so well, being with someone so wonderful and special that they defy every preconcieved notion that experiance has taught you.
this poem is amazing, there isnt one weak line here, everything you have written compliments the previous line and builds on the `true love` theme. i applaud you sean, i could never have written this. i really hope from the bottom of my heart that you and amber are united before to long and have a happy future together. on this evidence of this poem no one could doubt your feelings for this girl. thankyou so soo much for you comments on my poems, always enjoy reading your views. 5/5 top marks

Wow Sean...and you say OUR poems say just how you feel...well right back atcha!!! Just read your last one again and now this...it's amazing...and...like you say..just how I'm feeling right now..sooooo soo in love and not much to be done about it at moment..but things are in the process and we will all be happy in the end..soo much to look forward to, and that makes the days easier to bear. Love, Luck, and great poem!!! Michelle :)

WOW.WHAT CAN I SAY. YOU HAVE A WONDERFUL TALENT AND IT SHOWS IN YOUR WRITING. THANK YOU FOR ALL OF YOUR COMMENTS ON MY POEMS THEY REALLY MEAN A LOT TO ME. YOUR WORDS EXPLAIN THE POEMS SO WELL AND THEY MAKE ME FEEL THE WAY YOU DO. AND NOT TOO OFTEN DOES THAT HAPPEN. SOTHANK YOU FOR EVERYTHING AND PLEASE KEEP ON WRITING AND NEVER STOP DREAMING BIG. LOVE ALWAYS,
~RACHEL~