Nice metaphor : ) very delicate but sad sounding

That is soo sad, but unforunetly it is what happens. I wish the butterfly could live.

Wow Jessy..this poem is so discriptive. As I was reading I could picture every detail. Well Done!

sophie:) xo

Awh! This was wonderful Jessy. I never expected it to end the way it did though, it was so sad. But although it was sad, you had some really beautiful imagery. Lovely. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

This is really beautiful!
So sad and delicate.
..xx

Oh, another sad poem,
this is another great work by you, you are so talented, another 5/5 from me, keep up your best work

A wonderful job on a beautiful poem. Every detail is written perfectly, creating clear imagery. It's so sad, yet still beautiful. A great write. Keep it up. =] 5/5

Wow, beautifully done, Love. It was amazing. Such a strong detailed, image filled write. I loved this poem.

This is sad but you had very good imagery...you're good with words
good job

Awww now these one has a sad poem ending. Your descriptions were soft and beautiful and so sad all wrapped up in one. Your imagery was outstanding.

Simple amazin

You are talented, great poem!

Loved it, nicely done.

This was really beautiful and painted am amazing picture, great job!
~Jules

Powerful, moving and inspirational, truly a great poem, keep up the good imagery work as well :)
Nathan (new to poetry)

Congrats on winning, Jessy!! Very well deserved!!

Natalie``

This is beautiful. i wish that my poetry could appear so eloquentlly. good job.

Truly lovely and evocative of something so many of us human butterflies have seen and felt.....
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one suggestion: The gentle wind and birds *cry* the only sound.......

Wow...such beautiful imagry! I love your writing, girl! keep it up! I can't find anything to correct, either, nice job!5/5

Congrats on winning u deserve it