Comments : Weakened Butterfly

  • 11 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Nice metaphor : ) very delicate but sad sounding

  • 11 years ago

    by Esther

    That is soo sad, but unforunetly it is what happens. I wish the butterfly could live.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sophie

    Wow Jessy..this poem is so discriptive. As I was reading I could picture every detail. Well Done!

    sophie:) xo

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Awh! This was wonderful Jessy. I never expected it to end the way it did though, it was so sad. But although it was sad, you had some really beautiful imagery. Lovely. Keep it up! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by Brooke Amity

    This is really beautiful!
    So sad and delicate.
    ..xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Oh, another sad poem,
    this is another great work by you, you are so talented, another 5/5 from me, keep up your best work

  • 11 years ago

    by Tammie

    A wonderful job on a beautiful poem. Every detail is written perfectly, creating clear imagery. It's so sad, yet still beautiful. A great write. Keep it up. =] 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Wow, beautifully done, Love. It was amazing. Such a strong detailed, image filled write. I loved this poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by jello

    This is sad but you had very good imagery...you're good with words
    good job

  • 11 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    Awww now these one has a sad poem ending. Your descriptions were soft and beautiful and so sad all wrapped up in one. Your imagery was outstanding.

  • 11 years ago

    by bluecrush

    Simple amazin

  • 11 years ago

    by AshLetitia

    You are talented, great poem!

  • 11 years ago

    by Robert Spence

    Loved it, nicely done.

  • 11 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    This was really beautiful and painted am amazing picture, great job!
    ~Jules

  • 11 years ago

    by Nathan Hickling

    Powerful, moving and inspirational, truly a great poem, keep up the good imagery work as well :)
    Nathan (new to poetry)

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Congrats on winning, Jessy!! Very well deserved!!

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni

    This is beautiful. i wish that my poetry could appear so eloquentlly. good job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Truly lovely and evocative of something so many of us human butterflies have seen and felt.....
    ............................................................
    one suggestion: The gentle wind and birds *cry* the only sound.......

  • 11 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    Wow...such beautiful imagry! I love your writing, girl! keep it up! I can't find anything to correct, either, nice job!5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by fauji

    Congrats on winning u deserve it