Wonderful use of imagery and your vocab is used so well. I like the theme and idea of this poem. It's unique, it's good to see. Keep it up. =] Definately 5/5

O.O

Very original. You have a far fetched imagination lol. Great job. I liked the idea of the things making the swings creak. -shivers- Reminds me of a horror movie lol. Keep it up. I loved it! =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Wowee-- Jessy! Very dark poem. ;P

A haunted Carnival.. now that scares me. Tehe. I'm NEVER gonna go to one every again now cause of this poem, tehe!

It was very nicely done. Great flow and awesome word usuage. Just simply great as per usual. Keep it up! Ily. 5/5

Natalie``

Now this I add to my long lines of favourite poems.
Good Work!

It was a nice dark poem that I would suggest turning into a short story, it might sound better that way. You have some unique descriptions to set your tone.

Wow...very well expressed, nice imagery, well written. 5/5