Wow, Gary I had saw some really big words in there.

.........once again, you AMAZE me. your words about positively astounding. brilliantly written gary, brilliant *applause*.
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wolfy

I love how you worked the 2 types of stanzas together the one has lots of unusual words that dont give so much an image but have a story behind every sentence, have a lot of meaning, and how you made them all start with the same letter must have been difficult. then suddenly you change to the 2nd where it is simple and conveys imagery intense and short. of understanding behind the event. had to read it a couple of times to get it properly but it is amazing. loved how you ended it with the the last four stanzas especially
"The only moral I have to tell
is that in this life we all create
our own heaven and our own hell" so true. this is really a poem to inspire my own i love the style. so original

This is the first poem of yours that I have read and I am so glad to have done so. There are maybe two or three poets here with the same quality and I already know that your other poems will keep me heartily entertained for a good long while to come.

I have never seen a poem with the structure this has. The first line had me visualisingall the possible reflections and settings the words could describe and I haven't that experience ina long time.

On the technical side there appear to be a few spelling mistakes, but that could be an American/English cross-over and they hardly bear weight enough to mention.

My favorite line is 'Mired in myriads of mortality' because mortality seems to shift the more I read it. It's almost like it doules as morality too. Probably not intentional, but whilst I'm probably the only one to get that feeling, it makes it feel more important to me.

Sombre and outstanding.

Bret

GoSh, i need a dictionary foR me to ReaLly understand your words.. & those lines aRe too deep i guess for me to appreciate everything.. anyway,, for the some of your poem that i read, it's great, you exactly express what you feel.. & you're a deep person,, so deep..

Wow, this was very good. i like how you used words begining with the same letter for each line. 5/5

Gary everything I read of yours is wonderful. You have a given talent that few posess.

I really liked the style ,I think I`m still kind of green as a poet so I`m not sure I understood it all, but I liked what seemed to me to switch from very complicated to plainly stated ,I really liked that.

"learning’s of lucid luminosity
meandering meditations of melodrama
decaying desolation of desperations
repercussions of resplendent righteousness"

This is the second poem of yours that I have read, and what can I say...you're an exceptional poet :) The alliteration worked beautifully throughout the piece, the message so profound and woven into words so well. I applaud you, Sir, and thank you for sharing such a prodigy among us. :)

Yours truly,
Esham.