Comments : Moments in Mind

  • 11 years ago

    by Misstress

    Very thought provoking poem you have here angel.
    Good Write.

    Keep on writing on what you feel and like.

    God Bless!

  • 11 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Ohhh...Creative, Unique. Flows well, wording is good. Hrmm. I liked it. Good job. ^^

  • 11 years ago

    by Kristina

    Awww this is really sad.
    i really like this poem a lot.
    you did a wonderful job writing it.
    you have talent.
    keep writing 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awhh, that was really sweet.. It flowed well, teh descriptions were good and the love really shone through.. Great job sweetie, keep up the excellent work! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful poem you potray here, its simply but writing well with beautiful emotions, well done!

  • 11 years ago

    by Fairytales

    It's sooooo good, my gosh, it was amazing!!! You did SUCH a good job!!! *hugz*

  • 11 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Thats a very nice poem!
    the love in it was flowing the whole time
    keep it up!

  • 11 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow very sad poem, but i really like it a lot. i can relate to it. the flow was really nice. and the rhyming was amazing! keep writing! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 11 years ago

    by Letty

    Another wonderful write hun! I'm glad I added you to my favorites so that I can keep up with your beautiful poems. You have a wonderful talent for love poems. You put strong and deep emotion into each word so that the reader can really see that the words come from the heart. Keep up the wonderful work. 5/5

    Letty

  • 11 years ago

    by Ashley Ann

    Great poem! You really did an awesome job! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Pretty good, I my favorite stanza is:
    You have forgiven me
    And even showed your smile
    I just felt so happy
    Because its been a while
    Your rhyming is excellent,
    Great Job
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    That was good, better than the other one, although it still seemed a little rocky where the flow was concerned buyt a good read overall. keep it up
    xxxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I really liked this. Great flow. Love the last stanza. Love the emotian. You write great love poems! Its great! Keep them up! xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Bridgette

    I loved this! The last stanza left me completely speechless. You wrote this very well and it seems well thought out. The emotions that you captured were portrayed very well and the poem overall was amazing! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Oh I really enjoyed this. The flow was excellent. I also loved the way you ended it, it really rounded the whole poem off. Good job.

  • 10 years ago

    by Lauren Crandall

    Lil' prob-
    begun-began, or had begun

    Alas.i like that word.

    anywayssss.
    to tell the truth i did not know this had an abab rhyme scheme until this stanza
    For I knew you were there
    To be with me always
    No doubt I felt the care
    Shown by your gentle face

    and this stanza kinda broke it!
    face and always do not rhyme because the beats they land on inthe P meter. or w/e. i would try to adjust this stanza

    Overall very well penned.

    x3 Lauren

  • 10 years ago

    by Cassandra Wojick

    I really liked this, great job. youre truly talented.

  • 9 years ago

    by Shinobi

    A really good poem, rhymes and stanza's express each a unique meaning. A touching story with another great ending 5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    The whole poem was building me up and then the last verse melted me all down and took it all out of me, I really enjyoed reading it, I love how you had your emotions consumed in each world, bravo bravo