Comments : Spotted Fur [Haiku]

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Wonderful job. Because of the title, did the olive eyes stand for the spots?

  • 17 years ago

    by Misstress

    "Olive eyes hold sharp gazes"
    This line hold the poem together, its the strongest line for me. along with
    the mysterious ending.
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Letty

    I totally get it. I've read a lot of Haiku poems. I've always loved the concept of them but I never truly understood the whole syllable counting thing until I just read yours. Now I totally get it. I enjoyed reading this poem. Great job! 5/5 Keep up the excellent work.

    Letty

  • 17 years ago

    by disturbed one

    Wow awesome poem
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Woah, i love it. I like reading haikus. Ive never written one thoguh but this is great! Love the discription and evrything! 5/5 xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Very good. The last line was great and really brought to poem home

    Elegant deciet.

    Great job

    Happiness
    Jeannie

  • 17 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    I realy dont now what to say to this one, i loved the last line
    'elegant deciet' but i thought the other two didnt really live up to it!

    4/5

    ~Murder.

  • Hey, i like the way you've interpreted the Sharp gazes as deceit, well done, short n sweet.
    Love Mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    Great job on the Haiku. i've tried to write one many of times and never could =[. you don't seem to have a problem with it though. excellent job! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    This is another great poem that i liked. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Nice!
    short but amazing!
    keep it up!

  • 17 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Wow...this is probably one of the best haikus i've ever read

  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    Woah, very nicely written! The last line is such a strong finish, with perfect words. You chose exactly the right words to put what you wanted across. Excellently written. Keep it up. =] 5/5

    Tammie x

  • 17 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    This is a great haiku, i love it! short, simple but it paints a great picture. 5/5