Omg, Taleee.. You are just too good.. Lol.. Wow.. This was great as well.. I loved the repitiition of "Desolate Truth" it added effect.. Why are all your poems so sad sweetie? You okay? Great job, Ily! 5/5
Very interesting poem Nat. For some reason, the first line didn't connect with me. "salt tongues," I think it was because you should have wrote 'salted' I guess it's more of a present/pass tense issue. Lol, but the rest of the poem was great. I sort of miss that free-style type poem, where you wrote what ever came to mind. *sigh* Oh well, this type still just boggles my mind.
Excellent poem. I loved the rhyming scheme you used, how the 3rd && 4th lines in each stanza rhymed, that was different-in a good way. I also loved your choice of words
Gold lingered on silky smooth skin,
Synthetic portrait failed attempts,
Bathroom odors filled the clear airs,
Reflections tormented weak mind,
Desolate truth reaching in despair."
Excellent imagery in that stanza.
Overall a great poem with wonderful rhyming && flow to it. [5/5]..I don't think there's anything I would change about this poem.
The flow in this poem is notably better than the rest of your poems, though I don't like the word choice very much. I'm also not quite grasping the meaning. I don't think this poem is as good as your others... 4/5.
Again, wow! The imagery in this poem is amazing, you used the perfect words to describe this story. Very sad. I love how you used the repetition of Desolate Truth in the last line of every stanza, it made it stronger. Great work! =] 5/5
Wow... thats all i can say.. haha... well im gona try to put my feelings into words... it was great... the words you used were deep... loved the way you repeated the title... unique... flow and imagery were great... keep writing! love your poems!