Green Eyed Reflection {Monchielle}

by Natalie   Oct 13, 2006


My green eyed reflection,
Reveals nothing but truth,
Hidden behind tear drops,
Soaking in broken hearts,
Waiting for pains to stop.

My green eyed reflection,
Prays for great happiness,
Far beyond my own reach,
Where rainbows re-appear,
Along side sandy beach.

My green eyed reflection,
Stares fear into the eyes,
Indulging every chance,
To change all past mistakes,
Into a hopeful dance.

My green eyed reflection,
Turns and looks right away,
Enhancing hope and strength,
To now carry on through,
No matter what the length.

13th October 2006
Copyright (C) Natalie

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The Monchielle is a poem that consists of four
five-line stanzas where the first line repeats in
each verse. Each line within the stazas consist
of six syllables, and lines three and five rhyme.
The rhyme pattern is Abcdc Aefgf Ahiji Aklml.
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  • 11 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    I've never read this kind of poem before; I love it. Especially because some of the lines rhyme, but it's not over the top---Also, the repitition has a nice effect on the poem---You should write more of these! Love it, hun---5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tammie

    Wow, that looks like a really hard style to write. But you did it very well. I like the story behind it, and the ending finished it perfectly. =] 5/5

    Tammie xo

  • 11 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    I've never heard of a 'Monchielle' poem before, it's neat though. The repeating line really helps the flow and makes the meaning stronger. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by ether

    Awwh! Nata!! That was so good and sad! I loved the second stanza, it flowed so well. The vocaublary was great and it actually seemed to flow better than your other poems because you used less of the "bigger" words. Great poem, 5/5 Ily

    jess ~

  • 11 years ago

    by isaiah

    U a beast shordy