My tears =)

by Sweet lig   Oct 15, 2006


If only my tears could speak,

They'd speak, how my broken heart
Is unable to mend

They'd speak, about all my fears
Weaknesses, and doubts

They'd speak, how my heart and soul
Have deeply hurt for the few depressing days

They'd speak, of all the memories
Which haunt me everyday in my dreams

If only my tears could speak,

They'd tell you, the pain inside my heart
And don't know when it heals

They'd tell you, about my wishes
For once, i could see you and hug you for a litlle while

They'd tell you, how my head
Is confusing for a lot of things

They'd tell you, all my thought of self
And my wishes, my life would end...

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  • 9 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    Okay i really did like this poem. you were very good at getting your point across. i do have a few suggestions for this:

    "They'd tell you, how my head
    Is confusing for a lot of things

    They'd tell you, all my thought of self
    And my wishes, my life would end..."

    I think it would look better as

    "They'd tell you, how my head
    Is confused for so many reasons

    They'd tell you, all my thoughts
    And my wish, of my life would end..."

    and then maybe if you added at the end

    "If only my tears could speak...."

    Just what i think would make the poem sound better.
    but over all i really did like the poem.
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by lish

    This is a well written poem, i love the wording and feeling in this poem
    well done

  • 10 years ago

    by lish

    This is a well written poem, i love the wording and feeling in this poem
    well done

  • 10 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Cliche, but not too bad. I'm not too sure what else to say, but if I were you, I'd get away from cliche.
    For, when you aren't writing cliche like, you do an amazing job. Particarly on nature poems.=]

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I wasnt really sure at times what you were talking about in some places. I didnt think it should be in hte slang catogory i think it should be placed somewhere else. The emotion was great and meaningful Good effort~mel