Comments : Rejection

  • 11 years ago

    by Candy

    Heyy, I really like it, and i no what its about so its all that more touching but don't let people get to you i know you personaly and you a wonderful person, you strong wise and fun so just forget about everyone and try to have fun i know thats hard to do but you'll relize life is better when you try to forget about the people that hurt you and put them in the past, if you can't do that then just try to have as little to do with them as possible , i'll talk to you later lol. xoxo love Crystal!

  • 11 years ago

    by Clarissa

    Well done nice ryhme schem as well
    and the 3rd stanza i can totally relate to!
    -ClαÑ┬Ćissα ♥

  • 11 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, I sort of see why you would put this one here instead of the sad poem section. The rhymes were pretty good, not brilliant or anything, but were average. It was an overall good poem. So well done and keep up the good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Karma Hope

    No no I liked that it was in this catergory because i think everyone can relate to this once in their lives, so yes very good work...
    Karms.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kristina

    Oh wow this is really good. i can relate to this poem in a way. you did a great job writing it. it flowed really nicely and had emotion in it. and i think its fine in this cat. keep writing! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This was very sad, yet the meaning was very clear to see behind the words, and i thought it was very well written.

  • 11 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Fantastic poem!! Yeah, i think it belongs in the poems anout life section. I really like the flow of it. Well done and keep it up!! xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Yes it should be in sad poems but its ok i love the flow...marvelous poem of yours5/5

    takecare

  • 11 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Yes it should be in sad poems but its ok i love the flow...marvelous poem of yours5/5

    takecare

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Hm. This was a little sad, but I do agree. It seems more life section.

    She lets no one discover,
    What really is under,
    Those miles and miles,
    Of fake little smiles.

    ^^I really really liked this stanza, alot. It reminds me of myself so much. I always try my hardest not to tell people about my problems, I'd rather have people thinking I'm fine.

    The poem itself was good. Flow was nice and smooth. Emotions were strong and raw. Loved it! Keep it up!

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    A few minor niggles:

    You don't need Those in Those miles and miles.
    It's only there for syllable count and it works just as well without it.

    Secondly it should affected not effected.

    The title bothers me somewhat. I don't think it's good enough for the piece you've written. It does the job, but it's basic and so very obvious.

    Good showing.

    Bret

  • 11 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Excellent job. A very good message about bullying, teasing etc. i loved the second stanza

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Beautiful penned, well ryhme yet flowed with great message, keep them coming, have a nice day, take care.

  • 11 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    For some reason, the rhyme scheme really works well for this poem. Usually, I don't like Clerihew (aabb) much, but it makes the meaning stand out more.

    Nice work! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by kelS;

    OMG. this is liek the story of my life. i actually like it so much. and i know why you put it in here because its actually about life.. its not depressing thats just what her life is about. i love it 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    If i were to lie i would say it was perfect but no poems perfect however this was a fantastic effort perhap you could have put more metaphors in it to help give us a easy vision but that may be your style and i like individuality i really do like your poems sammy xxx alex xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Vonnie McHugh

    Lovely verse thanks for sharing

  • 10 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Good write. I don't know if you noticed, but this poem took a different approach on that subject matter than most poems do. I liked that. The flow could definately use some work.. I'm not exactly sure how though--- I think the imagery was fantastic. Great job! Keep writing!

    yours truly-
    xxEvilAngelxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Good Work! A lot of people can relate to this poem because quite a few people feel like this, I know I use to. You're a great writer, keep it up! 5/5

    Innoc3ntStar

  • 10 years ago

    by Lacey Marie

    Hey thats a really good poem i like that one alot!!