I don't think it flowed so well. I think for a nature poem it had too many deep descriptions of people and not as many for nature.
try writing a haiku, they are the best type of nature poems you can find, check out any of mine.
xxxxxx

This describes nicely the fun of snow. The only stanza that seemed nature related to me though was the first one.. Which I felt was a good description of a snowy winter day.. However I think You could have made it a lot more nature related.

All in all though it was an enjoyable read.. Well done xx

The oustanding imagery in this poem touches my inner child

This is a chipper little piece and an it certainly took me back a few years I don't mind to admit.

The only thing I would re-write is the last stanza. It feels like you're trying a little bit too hard to hit the nature phrase home. Trust me, this poem doesn't need it, you've said it in the poem already. But I'd keep

For what fun is snow
Without the children enjoying it?

as a closing statement, it works very nicely indeed.

Bret

It nicely written but i dont think if it flowed so well,, the story is good but i believe u can write more better than this one. so keep on writing and god bless u

I agree that the flow could be better but I always love it when someone tries something new! this poem brought a smile to my face (even if i am in a bad mood right now - ty) I definately think you can improve this one!

xxEvilAngelxx

Beautiful! Loved it! 5/5. It was very cute too. =>

♥Much Loves,
Taylor =>

Nice poem. It’s very sweet, very true and I get immediately that winter feeling (now where’s my hot coco?)
Further, I like the part with the elders. I can imagine how they look with a smile at everyone and that they are thinking about their own youths. I really love poems that do that to me so; 4/5.

I thought that Evergreen trees are covered with there white sprinkles we call snow.
The cold white sheet of snow covers the ground,

didnt make much sence, but the rest was fantastic i think i will write somethign like this thanks for th inspiration xxx alex xxx

It was great, reminds me of a few years ago at winter, it does make me remember winter and being carefree with out a worry on my mind,peace and calm. Serenity of the snow then the bustle of children playing then back to serenity of the snow.

This was a great start to nature poetry. You'll find it's fun and addicitvie to write! I espeicailly loved how you closed it with the children ^_^ Because truly if they weren't there snow wouldn't be half as fun. Some suggestions:

Evergreen trees are covered with there white sprinkles we call snow.
^this is kind of awkward perhaps just cut off the end so it reads "evergreen tree covered with white sprinkles'

Leading towards the destination of peoples homes...
^nice imagery but 'peoples homes' ruins the flow. Perhaps just 'home' or another adjective instead of peoples.

Those are just suggestions, it was a nice write ^_^ Keep smiling, keep writing!

This is a great poem!
loved the ending

"For what fun is snow
Without the children enjoying it?"

it was very nice...
5/5 keep it up!

Wow this is rly good for ur 1st nature peice! i rly like this 5/5 good job!

Hmm.. This was pretty good. The descriptions and imagery were good, but I felt the flow was slightly off. Also, some of your commas and such are in the wrong places and you put some words in that weren't necessary. I think this would also be improved with a rhyme scheme, but that is just my opinion. Great job for a first time though, 4/5

The description in this was absolutely amazing.. especially for your first nature poem. I loved the first stanza.. the way that you described snow was absolutely beautiful. The last two lines of the poem worked really well and I thought it just brought the whole poem together nicely. You did an amazing job on this! 5/5 Keep it up!

+.+ Don't worry. I find it hard to rhyme and flow a poem when talking about some subjects. It was a nice try for your first one. Lol. Very descriptive, but didn't really flow. Lol. That's alright. Nice try. +.+

Pretty good for your fist nature poem. better than my first one.

Nice poem! Very different! I was a great read, keep up the good work,
-AnnMarie

This was a cute poem. It really made me smile. =] I like snow SOMETIMES. I like the first snow fall, but after that, it isn't that nice at times. I like the warm weather. =] Excellent poem. 5/5

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Hey hun. You wanted me to read this one, which I already did two days ago. Let me tell you, just as excellent as it was 2 days ago. =] This poem makes me smile everytime I read it, and to be honest, I have read it like 5 times already. Keep it up. =]

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