Until I Saw You

I liked the repitition of 'Until I saw you'. I feel that it really made the poem seem like a really life experience. It flowed nicely. *5/5*

Alyson

Hey, thats what I feel for some guy....awesome poem : )

I think the Until I saw you after each line was a little un-necessary. Perhaps if you changed the saw in each line, building up to seeing him it would work better. If not, then just save it for the last line of the stanza. We often say more with less.

I'm sure you can find a better synonym for giggly. This is a love poem, and unless specifically designed to be so, a love poem shouldn't contain words that distract the reader in that way.

Not that I've seen you.

Small typo? Now?

However, on the flip side you managed to get your point across without miles and miles of needless words and fluff. I like that.

Bret

This poem takes me right back to high school. Every girl has gone through this at least once, and if u say you haven't your lying. I love this poem, great job.

XOX Tiffany