MY ANGEL OF THE DARK

Wow this is really good i like your free verse style and the content is something we all fall subject to so its easy to relate to great job!

From what I read of your work I liked the description and the flow was good abit long at times but so goes life. I think your main idea in the poems gets lost alot in your work. Having so many things pop up in your mind at once that happens but for the most part I think you should ask yourself what is the message I wish to convey to my reader and start with that. Ever sentance you write ask yourself the same question this will keep your work tight and the reader wanting to hear everything you have to say Plot121

I thought this one was very well written. It had some flow, and rhymes to it. In some places though, you seemed to leave out small, but crucial words in lines to make room for flow and rhythm. My opinion is to read it over, and check for any grammar mistakes you may have made. It'll help a lot when people are trying to read your poems.

The emotion in this was also very good. You seem to have a lot of emotion or pressure in your life, but you don't know how to jot it down on paper (or computer). That's what I'm seeing anyways. I don't mean that you can't write worth anything. You write great. But you write a certain way every single time. Try spicing it up a bit. People like that. And, you could always try to set up a format for each poem. This one had rhyme and flow and it was really good. But I think it'd be more straight forward if you broke the lines up into stanzas.

I'm not saying you need to change your whole poem around. It's your choice. I am simply saying that you don't always have to write the same in the future, and it's good to have something a little different now and then. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

You have THE most amazing way of portraying an image. BRILLIANT!!!!!! I have goosbumps!!!

Sorry I didnt get back to you sooner, I havent forgotten that I promised to reply. Just been so busy, anyway this is
such a lovely piece of work and your talent truly amazes me. I thought the way it was written was very clever
and to me as the reader, I find it interesting and unique to look at. Keep up the great work and my favourite part of the poem,
the bit that stood out the most was

with grief in her heart
and tears in her eyes
she'd beg forgiveness
for all the pain

an emotional, deep, well written poem, well done!