I thought that it was good. I liked the way that you started and ended with the same stanza. The rhyme scheme was good, its one that I use many times. Keep up the good work. *5/5*

I have no problem at all with the structure and flow of this poem . I am more interested in enterpreting the content

Beauty is eternity gazing at itself in a mirror.

But you are eternity and you are the mirror

If you truely are not pleased with the image in the mirror I think it would be wise to realize that no one in the world is more able to accept the grace to change the perception of what is reflected than the soul of that image

I look into that mirror
and at the reflection with spiteful eyes,
no longer the woman I once was
but only a person full of lies

that stanza really stood out to me.
When looking in a mirror it is easy to misjudge the image and forget it is a mere reflection and not who we truly are.
I liked the repeation of the 1st and final stanzas and for me they emphasise that the mere merely reflects what is on the outside and not the important parts of ourselves buried deep inside.

I thought your poem was really nice ^-^ and a great flow to it aswell

Easy to understand, great rhythm n flow...i really liked how u refered back to ur first paragraph, very good 5/5

I really like it even though its my second time reading it i don't remember if i commented the first time or not but if not i'll comment another one of your poems

Hey. I'm not sure if this is the poem you were hoping to get responses on, but here I am to do as I said. I really liked it, and I'm glad I came here. :). Now, before I say anything, I want you to know not to take anything offensively, as I don't mean it in a bad way. I'm simply sharing my two cents, and you don't even have to pay any attention to it. Anyway, to get on with it...The only thing I noticed might need some changing (according to my personal opinion -whereas someone else might completely disagree) was this part:
But just as painful,
as a swollen stye.
The randomness of a 'swollen stye' made me stop reading for a second and kind of wonder why you would use That as an example.And as soon as that question pops into my head, it's like I answered it by assuming you had a little bit of trouble writing that part and making it fit smoothly. Again, I mean nothing bad by this, as it really is a goodwrite, and there's nothing wrong with an example to make the reader feel exactly what you're trying to say; infact that part of it is a very good thing and I commend you for doing it. Although, if it were my own poem, I probably would have used a more metaphorical example, Maybe something like:
But just as empty and painful,
As a starless sky at night.
(Though, maybe not quite that, as there is to many syllables...But you get the idea)
Anyway over all, I really liked it and I'm still happy to give you a 5/5. Mainly because of the risk you did take with the example, the rhythm you held for the rhyme scheme, and the repition of lines in your first and last stanza -- I really liked that.

I really like this poem.

i feel the only lines that let u down are:

"But just as painful,
as a swollen stye."

the rhyme seems forced.

apart from that, welcome back to the world of poetry. =D

keep writing, u have talent,
xxx

It takes out bits and pieces here,
memories and emotions there.
Soon all that is left of me,
are memories I can not longer bear.

^^^ my fave stanza!
Wow this is great! your rhyming was really good, although the flow was abit off in a few places.
The way you started the poem and ended the poem with the same stanza was great, and very efective!

definatly 5/5 from me.

~Murder.

I liked it
The repitition was great
And the whole poem had good imagery and emotion so you deserve the 5/5 i'm giving you.
*Gem*

Wow, this is amazing. it really sounds like what the world wants women to be. it reminded me of myself because i feel like i try to be what the world wants me to be rather than what i want myself to be. keep up the good work.

That was really good:)...i liked how you described it all so well..i actually have a poem much like it. Here you used your words so well...flow was a tiny bit off, but it was still good.

Oh god, such a great poem.......... i really enjoyed it..........you are a great poet with a great talent...

keep up the great work like always and i really look ahead to read more of you.........5/5

Really well-penned! I love how you repeat the stanza at the beginning and the end...It pulls it all together--- the imagery and truth was excellent, too--- Only the flow needs a little work!

xxEvilAngelxx

I liked this poem, you wrote well about a big issue. The descriptions were good and the emotions were raw and untainted.

"as a swollen stye" Theres something really off about that line. I don't know. Perhaps its the description, but it really jerked me out of the poem.

I think you used too many full stops which made the flow interrupted, it would work better without any full stops, in my opinion.

Overall a strong write, well done

Keep writing
XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

I rele liked this ... uve expressed ur emotions in a wonderfull way...
keep it on

Nice rhyme scheme, and I like how you started and ended with the same stanza. Awesome poem, 5 from me. Well done!

Wow, this is amazing, the peices of your poem each express themselves so strongly, and fit together so well,
5.0
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I liked this.. The repitition was great. The flow was really good.

I look into that mirror,
and at the reflection with spiteful eyes,
no longer the woman I once was
but only a person full of lies.

^ This stanza REALLY stood out to me. Frankly, I don't know why.. I just think it was the best.

But just as painful,
as a swollen stye.

^ Honestly, I wasn't too fond of this stanza.. I think that 'stye' seemed a bit forced. & you just had trouble fitting something that would rhyme in with that.. so you used that. I just think you could of thought of something better. Cos obviously you have the talent. :]

Overall, beautiful.

Bri [x]