The Broken Mess You See

by ForeverYoung   Nov 11, 2006


-The Broken Mess You See-

Her mind throws her to the closest edge of pain
She holds on although there's nothing left to gain
So tired of all the lies that make her want to fall
Sometimes she wonders if there's any hope at all

She pulls herself up and she tries to run away
But something, holds her back and makes her stay
So there she sits alone trying so hard to feel
The pain is too unfair, there no way that it's real

The scars they tell a story, she will never show
But they continue living...no one needs to know
How can you feel so alone when everyone is near
Shes the one who's missing, her heart not fully here

Heart tangled in the horror of a shattered soul
Body goes numb and silent, hands shaking cold
Judged her by only, the broken mess they see
They do not realize that, they're still looking at me.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Oh wow! Another beautifully penned poem! You're really good at writing sad poems! keep up the good work! I really like the rhyming of the poem, keep it up. Flow was smooth, I like your choice of words!

    5/5! as always!

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    You are on a good enough level to experiment with other styles. I would like to see some of your future free-styles. Beautiful poem once again. I can really relate to
    "How can you feel so alone when everyone is near
    Shes the one who's missing, her heart not fully here"

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    Wow that is amazing! beautiful job, you're a great writer. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Beautifully filled with emotion. I noticed a few times you used commas where they really weren't necessary, but anyhow, the writing was fabulous.

  • 17 years ago

    by Rachel

    This poem explains just what I'm feeling. Very well written. =]