Comments : The Broken Mess You See

  • 17 years ago

    by Silent Screams

    WOW...well written..i kinda know how you feel
    auna

  • 17 years ago

    by amelia

    Excellent poem
    well written
    i love it that u write sad poems
    i'm gonna add u to my favourites...

    5/5
    ps- read my poem murder or suicdie... u'll love it.. pls vote & comment i'll return the favour

    Love
    amy

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    I'm listening to 'Everybody's Fool' by Evanescence... it fits perfectly with this poem... :)

    Its AMAZING! Kudos for the genre. Love sad.dep.dark poems. >:) I'm adding this as one of my favorite poems. Loved the story line, loved the rhyming, loved the flow.

    EXCELLENT job!
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Well done. story it told was good, rhymed well, so sad, i loved it.
    keep writing, my friend
    xxxxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I loved this, it was filled with emotion and meaning.
    I enjoyed the flow, rhyme scene and imagery.
    I particulalrly liked the last stanza.

  • 17 years ago

    by Felicia

    Truly a grand poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Amberinaa

    Amazing job!
    I loved the words you chose, it just made it flow so well and the ryhmes were perfect. for me the last stanza just finished if of perfect i really love the wording in the first line it's amazing.
    "Heart tangled in the horror of a shattered soul
    Body goes numb and silent, hands shaking cold
    Judged her by only, the broken mess they see
    They do not realize that, they're still looking at me."

    Althought it was alot like other poems it still stood out and was beautiful! great job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Shay

    That was really good , me liked . Keep up the great work mami .

  • 17 years ago

    by RaNdOmRoB

    Yo that poem was great so deep so much feeling. you will become a great poet one day!

  • 17 years ago

    by andrea

    Wow that was amazing! You're a very good poet, what an emotional poem, keep up the good work... don't ever lose touch with your emotions... that's what keeps us going!

  • 17 years ago

    by Katie

    All I can say is wow. That is one of the best poems I've read. It gave me the chills. I love it.

    ~Katie~

  • 17 years ago

    by N M Lambert

    A brilliant poem. you had me gripped from the first line. great job xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    This poem is wonderful, filled with feeling and things that the reader can understand. Good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Belgin

    Very well written, I loved it.

  • 17 years ago

    by HalfMoon

    5/5

    It was an excellent read, I especially loved the use of third person, it had a interesting impact. I don't really understand the use of the comma in the second last line of the poem, unless you meant it as a pause?

    I enjoyed it. Keep up the great writing, I'd love to read more.

  • 17 years ago

    by DarkJem

    Great poem:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Sora, The Lonely Poet

    This is a beautifully written poem. I'm not talking in the sense, but you did a wonderful job! This girl's pain..you displayed it with such superiority, it's amazing. Kudos all the way!

  • 17 years ago

    by Guilty By Design

    I like this.

  • 17 years ago

    by Peyton

    WOW!!!!! really good writing. there are alot of talented writers here, but you stand out. Well done
    -xXx-

  • 17 years ago

    by silent eyes

    Oh my gosh! i loved it! youre such a great writer! 5/5 =]