Comments : Questioning The Truth

  • 17 years ago

    by Alissa

    Wow, that was really unexpected. Wow, I'm still shocked it was really amazing. WOAH...lol that was awesome. I have nothing to say, great work!!

    WOWOWOW:)
    your friend,
    alissa

  • 17 years ago

    by xxxStarSxxx

    W-O-W! wow. That was amazing! Beautiful! Wonderful! and oh-so heart-filled! I loved it. the only thing that kinda messed me up was this line:
    You are my â??must haveâ??
    because of the little 'a' thinggies...what are they for? And my friend Gina says it's cute and I agree as well! Amazing! Beautiful! and oh-so heart-filled! I loved it...and it was so sweet. 5/5 girl and keep up the GREAT work!

  • 17 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    Omg that is such a sad poem! it was really powerful and touching, i really like it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    An excellent read! i really liked the way all the stanza's ended with a question. It makes the poem a really worthwhile read! It has an awesome style and great flow! Keep it up! xx

  • 17 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Love it, especially your use of parallel structure. (Feck, I sound like my english teacher *shudders*). Either way, it's a lovely poem, and it's utterly wonderful how you convey so many emotions so easily. Beautifully written, and I'm glad to have had the privilege of reading it.

  • 17 years ago

    by SCARECROW

    Wait, is it parallel structure or repetition? Repetition, isn't it? Haha, gosh, talk about an I-no-speak-engrish mistake.

  • 17 years ago

    by Anonymous

    Hm, well, as long as it's true feelings, then it's fine. I haven't read a poem like this, but it's pretty good. Each of the lines pertains to the question following. It's so emotional, too... :'[
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    Wow there was a great twist at the end, i liked it! beautiful poem, maybe next time put in a little more emotion though, let the reader deeper in your thoughts. nice job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylalala

    Wow that was really strong and i liked it a lot! 5/5
    Kayla

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaylalala

    Hey sry didnt realize til i wrote the comment that like everyone else said WOW but just lets you know it was super delicious!
    Kayla (again)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I wasn't expecting that ending, that came as a surprise.
    I loved this, it is my favourite of you's so far.
    Keep writing!

  • 17 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    I really like this one. You put alot of your feelings into for a short poem. Keep it up! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    *tears* Wow, I can relate to this greatly. This poem makes me think of my real dad whom I haven't talked to in many years, it brings back all those old memories that I do remember of him. A very sad poem indeed for me to read. You're a fantastic writer, keep it up. 5/5

    Stephane

  • 17 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    Omg...i can totally relate to this...i think the exact same things every day...excellent job writing these feelings down...5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Overall very sad. but i was thrown off a bit by the ending, i guess you wanted ti to end on a different note. bbut the poem is titled Do /you/.. But it was sad.. what ever happned im truly sorry. it flowed very vell-especially for a freeverse.

    x.x:Lauren

  • 17 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Wow . I didn`t expect the end .
    That was surprising, and different(:
    Which is why i lalala`love it, hun` .
    It was sad, but well written .
    The flow was good for a free-verse espcially .
    ..ღ__MiNDYY

  • 17 years ago

    by Brook

    Awe this is really good, but really sad. you can feel your emotions coming through.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    I loved this poem. The questions at the end of each stanza had a really nice effect on the poem. I think that it was very well thougth out. And although it was short, it held so much emotion in it. I don't think you should change anything in this. The flow and rhtyhm was really good and the questions fit with each stanza and added on to the sadness within the poem. You did an amazing job on this! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Mark

    This was a well written poem but this stanza needs to be changed:

    I talk right to you
    Words from my mouth
    Do you hear me?

    Instead of right.. try directly or another word .. right just doesn't seem to fit and make sense.

    Other than that, a good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    This was good but very simple. I felt that more detail was needed for it to be better. In some cases simplicity works but I feel here it didnt. Try adding more details and more emotion and it will be a better poem. Nice job though 4/5